The old antique shop - Part three

[curedolly]

Hm, I'm thinking of maybe switching this part and part two. I have a feeling anyway that everything that's posted now are just fragments that I will try to expand, change the order of and so on.
By the way, I've tried googling a bit for the biggest problem I have without any real results (don't know really how to phrase the search words). I can't

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[magickeyboard]

Oh I really enjoyed that, especially the last bit with Cuchulainn and Mr. Witherscombe. The little universe your creating is so rich with detail and vivid imagery, I love it

[curedolly]

Thank you :) I love creating worlds with a lot of detail, even if I don't use everything I 'know' about the world later - it give a nice feeling to things :) Often I can sit and do research for an hour for something that's going to be in one paragraph - but that's just because I'm geeky like that ^^
I'm glad you like him! He's a character that I sort of adopted from an unfinished story, I've been fooling around with him for a while and this story seemed to suit him! I'm glad you like the myth-references too <3 I like mixing the real ones with ones that could be real, and I've always been very fascinated with the celts as well :) I'm thinking that if there are to be magic in this world (that is, the one I'm creating, which is like ours only different... ) it would be fairly logical if it was closely connected to the myths we have

[magickeyboard]

Critiquing can be as hard as writing sometimes so I definitely understand! And don't be too hard on yourself because from what I've seen your definitely an amazing writer! It's just finding the time and energy and inspiration to sit down and do it that's the hard part, at least for me :-) I'm definitely with you on finding it hard to sympathize with people who write hundreds of pages and have to pare down, I'm usually struggling to get dozens of pages.
LJ is definitely a good place to practice writing and critiquing and you're right its easier sometimes to hear rejection from strangers and makes compliments sweeter since you know they have no personal stake in you.

[rephen]

I really enjoyed this chapter. I love the introduction of Mr. Witherscombe, and his delightful passion for stories. The Polynesian myth really added loveliness, for me. It's one of those stories that have been neglected by the many.

Cuchulainn is also wonderful. The fact that he growled at Mr. Witherscombe made me wonder if Mr. Withersombe is, indeed, not as harmless as he might seem.

Please, do write more.

And yes, I can relate not being able to write more than 13-15 pages. I have started many things that I have abandoned because they fizzled out at that mark. I don't know why.

I hope you will keep on writing about this story though. I can only offer you feedback as means of encouragement, but really, I have been enjoying it thus far! Please continue!

[curedolly]

Whee, I'm really glad you liked Mr. Witherscombe, he will have significance for the story, but I haven't decided completely how yet :) Are you familiar with the polynesian myth? It was one of those things that came to me and had to be written, I had never really read about it before, but I read a little about it after it had popped into my head. I'm a bit concerned about the correctness of it, maybe there are several, but brits in the 19th century might not have made a difference between them. More research is needed, and I might change it a bit to make it more correct :)

It's strange, the page-limit problem... I hope I will be able to overcome it in this story, maybe the people here on livejournal will be able to help me if I get stuck :) At the moment I'm in control of the story though, knowing that someone is waiting for the next part is a wonderful feeling!

[rephen]

Cant really say that I know a lot about Polynesian myth, to be honest. Just smattering of mentions here and there by very obscure sources. This is why I love it that it made an appearance in your story. It's so unexpected, and therefore, very pleasing :)

Glad you're in control of the story so far! I would like to see some sketches of the characters, actually (was thinking about this last night, before I sleep). Do you have any? I'd love to see <3

[curedolly]

Ah, I see :) Well I hope to have several little details like that, as I love to add them!

Oooh, you know, I used to try to draw my characters (that was before I started with this story) but I really can't draw people like I see them in my head, which makes me sad. I could tell you how I see them, which will be part appearance and part... charisma, presence, what's the word? Tell me if you want some brief descriptions, and I will make a post with them, or reply here! :)

[lavericknine]

I liked this chapter as well. I liked it in general. It seems kind of like it's still in an introduction phase. I mean, I don't see where it's going yet.

I don't know if this is your problem or not, but if you just write ideas that occur to you without knowing the plot and the end it'll be hard to finish it. It's a good idea to write down your ideas, but it won't turn into a book without some guidance and structure. I know that's kind of old school advice, but it's true. I keep about three documents of ideas.

It might also help to make your goal a short story and not an entire book. It might not be a book, but it's a good feeling to finish something.

It takes a lot of motivation and serious effort to finish a whole book.

[curedolly]

I'm glad :) And yes, I wanted a kind of slow start for the story - partly because I'm not a hundred percent sure myself where it's going at the moment. If this was a book these first parts would probably not be individual chapters, but posting a little at a time as I write helps me feel I'm getting somewhere

[lavericknine]

Don't think about who you're writing to, just write. It seems like a lot of teen writers tend to be concerned about who they're writing too... Well, if it's just ideas, write what you want

[curedolly]

Yeah, I tend to over think things sometimes, but I guess I'll just write and let anyone interested read

[pogonip63]

Hello, I wandered over here from writers_loft several days ago and enjoyed reading this, but got interrupted and forgot to come back and leave a comment. (sorry)

I enjoyed this. I like your style and the characters are interesting. I'd enjoy seeing what happens next. May I add you so I don't miss an update?

[curedolly]

Oh, I'm so glad people enjoy it! It's the first real story I put online so it means a lot :)

Feel free to add me, it means a lot as well! I'll try to take a look at your journal as soon as I have time :)