he passed his time he passed his time he traveled wide and passed his time
i like that verse the best. I think those are some pretty damn good lyrics, i think if bowie sang that slowly kind of like rock and roll suicide.. it would sound really fucking good
I agree with them, music does make or break a song. however, the lyrics are pretty good (i know jeffire would be proud ;) ) I think u def have some talent, and the more songs u write, the more they will flow. I def. like it tho... XO Cor
hey there- this is actually pretty good chris. i like the switching up of the far and wide in the chorus, clever. it is a little bit hard to hear the rhythm without music, but thinking about it poetically i think it has a lot of potential. very mysterious, but not bad.
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I dunno, I guess it would be better hearing it with music maybe.
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he passed his time
he traveled wide
and passed his time
i like that verse the best. I think those are some pretty damn good lyrics, i think if bowie sang that slowly kind of like rock and roll suicide.. it would sound really fucking good
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this is actually pretty good chris.
i like the switching up of the far and wide in the chorus, clever.
it is a little bit hard to hear the rhythm without music, but thinking about it poetically i think it has a lot of potential.
very mysterious, but not bad.
hope everything is good with you otherwise, too.
~jayme
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