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cyacide

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Dec 16, 2003 21:32

OK before i scare the hell out of you i was writing this next one trying to think through someone else's perspective.... im not a freak.....this was written long ago before i ever read ayn rand...that was fort the record ( Read more... )

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anonymous December 17 2003, 21:30:02 UTC

absolutely gorgeous was blown away... u have a talent.. dont let it go... wow... just wow

cyacide December 18 2003, 03:33:22 UTC

thank you, that means a lot to me

anonymous December 19 2003, 06:56:11 UTC

you would think, just stop doubting urslef... u have a fucking talent rj, ass much as you dont think so.. uve got something

emotionaldecay December 20 2003, 07:47:51 UTC

dude... it rocks... i just have a few criticisms, and everyone loves criticism, right ( ... )

cyacide December 21 2003, 22:00:00 UTC

this asctually does mean a lot more ot me than any compliment, becuase you truly understand poetry, you righ tabout the first stanza i think i did it because i was trying to work so hard on t he first stanza and i wasnt quitte flowing yet, so it came off as a little to techincal. THe last six words were asemi-akward what i was trying to do was to leave a lasting imprint on the reader with the line to put that image in their head. But it didnt work out quite as i'd hope, it really could have been more powerful, i was trying to write a suttle exposition at the same time becaus ihad already past th climax and i was trying also to have a more suttle ending. Aopperently my miz was more of a contradiction thought, as i contradict myself now ( ... )

pontiuspcrucifi December 23 2003, 05:56:15 UTC

im scared... (is that deep enough fer ya?!)