Comments | cypanache: FF: still so far out of reach (leslie/ben presidential au)

cypanache

FF: still so far out of reach (leslie/ben presidential au)

Oct 20, 2011 20:46

Title: still so far out of reach (1/3)
Pairing: Leslie/Ben (AU)
Word Count: ~5,000 (this part)
Rating: PG-13 this part (R over all)
Timeline/Summary: Alt!Universe with Leslie as President of the USA and Ben is one of her secret service agents. (p.s. Everything I know about the Whitehouse or the Secret Service I learned from watching the West Wing and ( Read more... )

leslie knope, fanfic, ben wyatt, parksandrec, leslie/ben

Comments 35

saucydiva October 21 2011, 01:16:42 UTC

I love AUs. And this is fun (how great is it that when she says that thing about the bird, she means it) but I also really like the sad touches, from Dave-as-the-reason she apologizes, to the Ice Town shooting. I am so excited to see where this goes, and I am glad you are getting over your writer's block.

anonymous October 21 2011, 01:21:42 UTC

OMG THIS IS SO FANTASTIC.

stars_inthe_sky October 21 2011, 01:48:36 UTC

Um, this is kind of fantastic. You had me smiling at the West Wing references (although CJ/Danny is my OTP over there, not CJ/Simon). And the way you've worked in all the Parks bits is nothing short of a revelation, from the dialogue to the who-takes-on-which-roles to Ron never ever changing to her code name being Diaphena! And the inclusion of Dave is a really wonderful and unexpected touch.

Because I'm picky and actually do work in politics, FYI, Ron would probably be her campaign manager, or some kind of special advisor or consultant. Chiefs of staff tend to be for people who are actually IN office or something comparable. I've never worked on a presidential campaign, but I think you've got a lot of the other pieces pretty spot-on.

In any case, I can't wait for part two :)

kyrieanne October 21 2011, 02:05:45 UTC

Your awesomeness makes me smile. :)

I like the way you juxtaposed Leslie's sunny, bright world with the much starker reality of hate and its' capricious nature. This set-up brings those two themes together and when faced by it in Ben's experiences she chooses derision over fear. She chooses to fight it even in the smallest way. Obviously I'm reading too much into it, but I always like it when someone takes the opposite of something and puts it together. I think it makes for great fiction.

Favorite bits:
-West Wing reference even if it isn't in fic.
-The way you worked Dave in and rewrote their history. Leslie going through the notes was lovely.
-Diaphenia as a code name.
-The way you make Ben intimidating and in-charge without changing him too much. He's still Ben. I thought using the glasses/eyes was a great way to do that.

rikyl October 21 2011, 02:15:53 UTC

Ben in aviators! Ron's crush on Ben's gun! The campaign has feelings! Code name Diaphena! Ice Town shooting! This fic has reduced me to reviewing in exclamation points. I'm just loving every bit of it, though.

Btw, when you posted on tumblr, I was hoping Ben's eyes would be a big reveal moment, and this did not disappoint. That whole scene in the hotel room was divine.