chapter 1

[daisynala87]

Comments

[tondada]

This will be fun revisitng Zac and Lindsey's journey! They are the cutest little 'super couple' and so perfect for each other!

Oh, and thanks, now I'm gonna have 'Crazy Bitch' stuck in my head for two weeks again like I did last time, haha! ;) Going to youtube it now!

[malfunkshon]

Well done with the editing, the story is a lot more polished now, and that lets you focus on the actual story more. Zac walking around in a superhero cape is an image I won't forget in a hurry. He probably does that in real life anyway.

The detail of Auntie Stacey boozy breath was horribly apt - it's things like that really help you 'show' rather than just 'tell.' Good work!

[eleflowerpot]

Yay! Glad to be able to read this from the beginning as I only read certain chapters before I think.

I like the details you've included about the family feuds, bit of drama is always good.

[daisynala87]

thank you sweetie for the review yes got to have little drama :)