Typos: pint = point gowrn = grown thoughtfully = thoughtful (choice word, check it)
Second thing: I LOVE THIS LINE!
It was, perhaps, the saddest ocean he’d ever seen - and he was unexpectedly glad it was theirs.
Third thing: POST THIS, DAMMIT! There are no rules to the community which is why it is so wonderful. You can post anything! If this is what the ugly tub inspired in you then you should at least post it. They are all nice, and they will give you kind and constructive criticism. ^___^ And if you think your use of the English language isn't good enough, think again. If this isn't on that comm by the end of the day, I am cross posting it myself to it. -_-;
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Typos:
pint = point
gowrn = grown
thoughtfully = thoughtful (choice word, check it)
Second thing: I LOVE THIS LINE!
It was, perhaps, the saddest ocean he’d ever seen - and he was unexpectedly glad it was theirs.
Third thing: POST THIS, DAMMIT! There are no rules to the community which is why it is so wonderful. You can post anything! If this is what the ugly tub inspired in you then you should at least post it. They are all nice, and they will give you kind and constructive criticism. ^___^ And if you think your use of the English language isn't good enough, think again. If this isn't on that comm by the end of the day, I am cross posting it myself to it. -_-;
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