posting this before I decide it's crap...

[dan_e_boy]

Cartooning was an interest, one of those passive burning dreams like tending a bar or being a hitchhiking backpacking travel writer. Filled with fleeting thoughts of "I could do that, I should do that" before the realization that it's hard and takes work, like everything else. The sketched out faces, barely more than simple expressions on sticks,

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[dispatchfromoz]

this is great and it totally reminds me of a famous author and when i remember who i'll let you know.

[dan_e_boy]

The obvious weakness of it is that I used passive voice and sentence fragments "artistically" as a crutch to avoid having to bother developing any kind of character.

[dispatchfromoz]

Mm. I'm actually a big fan of passive voice as a way to establish tone. And there are sentence fragments but the fact that there is no character to me makes me instantly generalize - you've described a common experience, and so everyone sees themselves in what you've written. I know I did. I wish I could remember who it reminds me of.

They said you should be a writer

[dispatchfromoz]

We read this while we were doing our Happiness Projects (ask me about this later) and it was agreed that it was very well written. My friends were impressed. Thought you should know.