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dandanfung

Radiant Dawn

Jul 06, 2011 21:10

Radiant Dawn
Donghae/Sungmin | R | Troy!AU
1935 Words
Warnings: Incest, Character Death
A/N: Loosely based on the movie/epic Troy. In case it's confusing, Sungmin is casted as Hector, the older prince, Donghae is Paris, the younger one. Heechul is King Agamemnon, Siwon is Achilles, and Sunny is Sungmin's wife. In case you're curious, I originally ( Read more... )

sungmin is everything in my life, fandom: super junior, greek myth, genre: romance, m: sungmin, pairing: haemin, donghae is my life, genre: au, m: donghae, rating: r

Comments 7

dandanfung July 7 2011, 04:21:46 UTC

spot for peachypeachy, i'd assume you'd read this even if you didn't reply me about my flailing and not being able to finish this piece. i pulled through though in the end, it's just not that good and somewhat lackluster? <333

peaches_n_kream July 8 2011, 02:44:57 UTC

(i would've replied, if i hadn't slept most of the day away yesterday =w= you wouldn't happen to know any miracle cures for migraines, would you? //ish a pig, huhuhu~)

but of course i'd read it~ and clearly you pulled through *\o/*

HOWEVER. WHAT IS THIS 'NOT THAT GOOD' AND 'SOMEWHAT LACKLUSTER' THING YOU'RE GOING ON ABOUT >:|

The sun complimented Sungmin’s body, his eyes twinkling and bright, and Donghae almost melted when his older brother leaned in to kiss him softly. what was that about not being able to write sensual, you liar, have your pants caught fire yet :| well, to be fair, this wasn't the most sensual thing to quote because there were definitely more suggestive things, but i liked how soft and airy and pretty this was; so sweet, and deceptively calm, how min's reassuring hae and there's that 'how did they get from this childish grudge to the point where everything went so very very wrong ;AAAAA;' aspect, what with how Donghae wanted to argue back, saying that, no, it wouldn’t be okay because Heechul was going to wage war ( ... )

dandanfung July 8 2011, 03:00:13 UTC

BLEH YOU SLEEP TOO MUCH ( ... )

peaches_n_kream July 9 2011, 22:13:10 UTC

BUT SLEEP IS LOVELY ;w; why can i never get enough D:

donghae standing on sungmin's feet and tipping up to kiss him as he ties the silk curtains around them reminded me of dream team and hyuk letting min stand on his feet because min was barefoot and the ground was hot. that and hae massaging min's feet. and what do you mean~ i thought the sensual bits still came through, all soft and pretty~ personally i think it's harder investing emotion in sensuality as opposed to, you know, just diving right into it. that balance between dragging/cliche and romantic/believable... the airily hidden feel totally complements the fic :3 secrecy, because forbidden love is the best kind of love. and imagery i strived a tad bit harder for the imagery and colours, and the sun/moon. \o/ i personally liked it, the cycle of sun/moon coming and going, like min being cold and warm, their uncertaintiy about everything comes and goes, blahblahblah. i liked it, even though i hadn't thought of it that way :O ( ... )

summer0smiles July 7 2011, 08:08:50 UTC

*cries* oh I can't... I... you... this... I can't even... /slumps
Oh haemin ;__;
What a heart stopping piece.

skyhaneul July 21 2011, 08:00:31 UTC

love it! ♥

although i did wish it wasn't so closely in line with troy. Hahah I had a hector-Achilles thing back in high school literature class. haha

gween_taiyou July 24 2011, 09:57:22 UTC

YOU ALREADY KNOW HOW I FEEL ABOUT THIS ONE, like, y'know, how much i love this and how it kinda almost not really made me tear up, i mean what. super junior? i hate them. adding it to my memories~