I've been writing stuff wrong all day for some reason. Well, you didn't write this wrong. There are a few typos, but they don't spoil the story at all. You write description very well and there are some really good lines which illustrate her feelings and thoughts - she went for the poke-a-fun-at-your-sibling's intellect route So like a younger sister to do that. for some reason she would have thought he'd rip into it like a 4 year old - great description. I wonder if she is right in her suspicions. Got to feel sorry for her, if she is. But she is resilient, so even if she is right, I suspect she'll manage to bounce back, eventually. *g* Nice.
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Well, you didn't write this wrong. There are a few typos, but they don't spoil the story at all.
You write description very well and there are some really good lines which illustrate her feelings and thoughts -
she went for the poke-a-fun-at-your-sibling's intellect route So like a younger sister to do that.
for some reason she would have thought he'd rip into it like a 4 year old - great description.
I wonder if she is right in her suspicions. Got to feel sorry for her, if she is. But she is resilient, so even if she is right, I suspect she'll manage to bounce back, eventually. *g*
Nice.
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I`m melting over here. ;) lol.
But hehe, thanks for the comment. *Hugs*
Yeah, she`ll push through. But heh`, it´s very complicated and all that. ;) I so love adding in some soapy aspects. :p
Now I`ve gotta go and it`s kinda hard to write some of this because things are not all in the same place. lol.
Sooo hot. Guh. But way beautiful and all. And woot, your using one of teh avi`s. :D
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