Homework help plox

[danidanidanica]

Because nobody ever corrects my grammars when we peer edit. Ever. Everyone seems to have gotten the idea that I somehow do not make any mistakes in my writing or they just don't realize it is a mistake when they look over it. This has made me terribly, terribly paranoid of turning in writing that I screwed up on but it just hasn't been caught

Comments

[wighty]

Editing is my passion! Sort of.
1. No comma in "They were best friends and shared a secret base." And this is just me, but I feel like 'like' would work better than 'including'.

7. No comma in 'the whole class gasped and fell silent'.

8. There might need to be a comma in 'No, I'm not', but I'm not sure.

I think that's actually all I can find! I might've missed some, but that's unlikely since Dani is perfect. ;) What a cute story. =)

[danidanidanica]

Fiiiixed. Thanks a bunch! And me being perfect is a lie, you lying liar D:

B-but it's so cheesy ick.