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dannysmystarboy

You Give Me Something chp.2

Jan 24, 2009 16:21

Author:Me!
Part:2/6?
Rating:PG-13 or you can decide because I can't pick
Genre:Romcom!
Pairing:Flones and Pudd :D so everyone smile!
Disclaimer:I own nothing(sadly) and this is all made up except Tom and Danny are in my closet right now :P

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you give me something

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fatal_scribbles January 27 2009, 15:40:47 UTC

Ooh, a twist, I approve! :D

When you're doing scene changes, it's best not to say it so obviously, as it interrupts the flow of your story. I always use a sequence of three hypens or asterixes, like so: --- -*- *** I find it's much less intrusive and it's still obvious the scene has changed. Other than that, I'm interesting in seeing where this goes. I hope Tom doesn't get too jealous, or worse, thinks they're genuinely in love and that he should back off. But it has to get worse before it gets better I suppose! ♥

dannysmystarboy January 27 2009, 20:14:59 UTC

yay! :D I think having a twist to the story is good

Thanks for telling me :) so I should use something like this ---?
Yeah but Im sure it will work out :)and the next chapter should be up on Thursday since I'm behind on homework right now ^^