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BSG Fic: Under the Shadow

Feb 16, 2006 22:11

Title: Under the Shadow
Author: daphnaea
Rating: NC-17
Spoilers: Minor ones through 2.16
Characters: Kara/Lee
Summary: “You love me,” he tells her, low and mocking. He can’t see her face, but a shudder runs through her body and he doesn’t know if it’s affirmation or revulsion.
Words: 3,000ish
Disclaimer: Not mine ( Read more... )

Comments 44

seldearslj February 17 2006, 07:06:18 UTC

Ooooh...

I don't read much BSG fic, but I really really love this! The split timelines make the whole situation slightly surreal, and it's powerful and painful and icky and totally frakked up between them, but also very true to the way I see them relating to each other.

daphnaea February 17 2006, 07:17:54 UTC

Thanks so much! This is way more graphic than my writing usually gets, but the story really demanded it. I'm glad it doesn't come across as over the top - personally, I think the reason they're so absorbing is that they actually are this intense.

seldearslj February 17 2006, 07:20:10 UTC

personally, I think the reason they're so absorbing is that they actually are this intense.

Oh, I'm in agreement with you! And you captured it well in this fic. Thanks again!

kajungirl81 February 17 2006, 07:08:20 UTC

Beautiful and lyrical and deep and dark, and I loved it. The T.S. Eliot quote at the beginning almost made me want to run away though because that man is evil and The Wasteland makes my head hurt. I'm way too tired to coherently express what I appreciated most in this story, but I guess it's enough to say that the emotions were so wonderfully tangible that I wanted to scream or cry or something. Great characterizations. It's so perfectly Kara and Lee, as individuals and within their unique dynamic. Awesome, awesome, and awesome.

I don't get the end though. Did it loop back around. That's my guess. Like the whole story kept flipping from the middle/end to the beginning/middle?? If so, that's *really* cool. If not, then I'm lost with that.

Ok, I will say that these little pieces stood out to me as particularly captivating:

She pushes him away, spits his blood at the floor. He twists her shirts up over her head and wipes his mouth on them before tossing them aside.GUH. How I love the dirty wrongness. When painted this ( ... )

zorb February 17 2006, 08:38:25 UTC

I loved all of it, but especially their mutual breaking point where they're both so completely emotionally exhausted from constantly fighting against one another that they collapse. Beautiful, hot, and angsty all together!

daphnaea February 17 2006, 09:48:32 UTC

Thanks! Glad you liked it.

siryn99 February 17 2006, 14:20:16 UTC

This story is so wonderful. It's just so them, you know. Both of them kind of screwed up and unsettled and messy. Amazing job.

daphnaea February 17 2006, 18:22:04 UTC

Thanks for commenting, and I'm glad the characterization worked for you!

brightest_blue February 17 2006, 14:53:25 UTC

Wow. This is really great. I loved the use of the T.S. Eliot at the beginning- it fit the stark, gritty way in which you wrote this so well. This is Lee and Kara at their best; sooo frakked up and yet so real, as if they are the only two people in the world who really understand each other.

daphnaea February 17 2006, 18:26:34 UTC

Thanks so much! Eliot fills me with glee, and that passage is so apocolyptic and I think captures how harsh and empty their world has become. And this story is about fear, in a lot of ways. And huh, I don't know if this is exactly their "best" :), but their confrontations certainly are when they're most fun to watch. There's always that profound connection, even when they're trying to use it to take each other apart.