yay, another crappy short story cause i have nothing better to do

[daredevilninja]

i had an idea for a story a couple of years ago and wrote it down but was never really satisfied with it below is it reborn, anew and hopefully written a little better, i invite you all to read it and offer me any advice you might have because i dont really know what to do with it myself, i think it might be to obvious for one, but enjoy

Comments

[burningtyger]

Not crappy, just edit it and it will be great, and yes I didn't see the ending coming, but that may be becuase I am oblivious to eveything.

[wake_up_donnie]

Sir, I take this as a challenge

old kevin?

[daredevilninja]

you best got some splainin to do boi, fore i com over der in stick ma foot up yo honky ass