Fic: In the end, these choices cast long shadows [HP, PG-13]

Jun 18, 2011 00:59

Author: dargai 
Title: In the end, these choices cast long shadows
Rating: PG-13
Characters: Severus, Lily, James
A/N: Yeah, this is the first MWPP fic I've managed to *finish*! Yay, me.

Summary: Lily sees changes where she least expects it. And some avenues are sealed forever.

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Boys are clumsy, with hard, shrill needs, and she doesn't have the desire to give in to them... )

fic: harry potter, rating:pg-13, james/lily

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pimentoplane June 17 2011, 19:48:29 UTC
terrific piece, truly. do you post on ff.net or anywhere?

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dargai June 18 2011, 03:24:10 UTC
Thank you so much! :D

I'm at ff.net under a different name, here. Just a caveat that I haven't written a lot of HP fics.

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snegurochka_lee June 17 2011, 22:41:33 UTC
Oh wow, that was just completely beautifully written! Loved it. :)

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dargai June 18 2011, 03:31:10 UTC
I'm thrilled that you liked it, particularly as I thoroughly enjoy your writing. Thanks!

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rijane99 June 18 2011, 04:02:19 UTC


No, really, I'll invest some time and effort since you produced a wonderful story! This is a triumph in deconstructing and reconstructing the connection between Lily and Severus, the breaking of it, the transition toward Potter, and making it all so fitting and believable. And, god, the poignancy of Sev's conversation with Lily (see, suddenly he's Sev, not Snape. Definitively so.)

There's a lot I love here, but I think my favourite bit is "She doesn't understand his greed." Also, Lily's bit here: "You don't know anything about love," she says, soft and low. "You can't love me and hate everything I am. I won't watch you destroy my world and do nothing. You need to be better than that."
As it ends, that day he hates his father more than he loves her, and so they choose their paths.

I don't have enough reallys for how good this story is. It's beautiful and it's done what Rowling didn't - make Lily and Sev's connection not only possible but beautiful.

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dargai June 18 2011, 04:42:06 UTC
Thanks, Ri, both for the lovely feedback and for investing time and effort in it. ;)

I'm really happy that Lily and Sev's relationship came through so well (he really is Sev in my head now).

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sevenperseids July 6 2011, 02:49:02 UTC
Just found this. Loved it. The scene between Lily and Severus was perfect. :)

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dargai July 6 2011, 04:08:51 UTC
Thank you. :) I'm really pleased that you liked it and 'perfect' is an awesome and unexpected compliment!

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