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Locked Inside, short prose

Dec 11, 2007 17:56

Title: Locked Inside
By: IDOL HANDS
Rating: PG
Warnings: dark themes, suggestion of death
Disclaimer: Characters aren’t mine; unlike the creators, I don’t make a dime from my madness. Comments & appreciation are payment enough.
Summary: Don’t you wonder occasionally, what’s really inside? Short prose. I wish I'd had time to make an illustration ( Read more... )

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st_minority December 12 2007, 23:48:16 UTC

Short and powerful. Very nice. :)
I liked the parallel use of the first sentence and then it again at the end. And the compare and contrast of W and C.

Very different twist on the prompt! :D

I think Willy needs a LRH costume. theidolhands December 13 2007, 01:02:44 UTC

Thank you for taking the time to read and let me know what you thought. This was an experiment in text for me, I've been doing those from time to time, trying to challenge myself and keep things fresh. And of course there are time constraints to consider. Is there anything you'd change or do differently or do you think it works as is?

I don't normally use techniques like repetition, I worry that I won't pull it off, I'm glad it worked for you.

I could lovingly pinch you for these prompts! Ya do make it tricky to make it dark and I look at the characters with a, "OK...any ideas?" I'm never sure what they'll come up with if they do and if ultimately I'll find it worth sharing. Heh. But then again, I really like it, because it ISN'T obvious and it forces me to think.

How fantastic would that be?! st_minority December 13 2007, 01:25:40 UTC

You are very welcome. :) It was different from your normal style - not so descriptive and quite shorter - but you made it work. With little words, you were still able to get across a lot of potency through them. I wouldn't change anything, but I'm not really the person to ask. I believe in what any author does, knowing that only they can truly convey the vision. :D I'll only look at my work and be like, "God, I should've done that differently."

Permission to pinch granted! haha It is tricky, isn't it?! I just have to have at least one thought that can be considered dark and then go, "OK! Let's use this batch!" But good to know it makes you think hard too!