HMD

[darkstone_hero]

How's My Driving?

Name: Touko
Version: Black and White games.

She is a silent protag, so alot of her personality is based on how the player interperts her reactions to things. Comments, concrit and tips on playing her are much welcomed and go here.

Anonymous is On || Screening is On*|| IP Logging is Off

*Will be unscreened upon reply. Please track

Comments

[fapsock]

Hi, I have a few issues with how you play Hilda/Touko.

First of all, her pokemon team is exactly the same as the one the mun used when playing the game, right down to the two legendaries and the shiny. One legendary is kind of overdoing it for a team but two is even worse. Perhaps not in the actual Black and White game but definitely in a roleplaying universe. I think it would be better to reflect upon what the character would choose instead of directly taking from the mun's experience.

Second, the way she phrases things is awkward and it seems more like the mun is inserting how she would respond to things than how Hilda/Touko would. In other words, a self insert.

Somewhat related to the awkward phrasing, the spelling and grammar in her tags are awkward, filled with typos. In one tag, 't5hink' was used. How did a 5 even get in there?

If these small details are rectified, I think you could do a much better job! As a final note, your HMD does not allow anonymous posting and logs IP address, contrary to what is posted.

[darkstone_hero]

Thanks for your input. I'll fix the last part ASAP. I thought I had it on, but clearly not. My mistake