As the World Falls Down Chp. 4

[darlinglileve]

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[munch_bunch]

aww poor john. he tried to escape he just got caught at the end. so with the dreams or memories john was in a insane asylum and was being treated for nightmares and being tested with different drugs. so in the last dream that was bane with john interesting and since john was being drugged so much he doesn't remember bane or bane wasn't bane yet looked different maybe.

[darlinglileve]

I don't know. You'll have to continue reading. C:

[lapointchick]

Oh. My. Fuck. You have no idea how much I love this. Me gusta mucho! My heart breaks for John and how depressing and scary Gotham's become. Then there's Bane who's obviously fallen for John and doesn't quite treat him in an awful way but it's all so twisted, 'cause it's not right keeping him as a slave! And when you continue this I will devour it, I swear xD

Oh and btw, a detail I noticed a lot in the previous chapter that you should probably look into correcting is changing Gatito Poco to just gatito or gatito chiquito, or gatito pequeño, because 'Gatito Poco' translates to 'Less Kitty' instead of 'Little Kitty'. I grew up speaking Spanish, so yeah, just thought I'd point that out and let you know. I'm not the best at it but if you need help translating things to Spanish I wouldn't mind helping you out :)

[darlinglileve]

Thank you sweet heart! I do actually plan on continuing this. I just been busy with the Inception Big Bang and basically life in general. I'll be continuing it soon!

Thanks for letting me know about that. I rely on an online translator to do my Spanish for me (it gets annoying but it helps). I'll keep that in mind for future reference! C:

[john_blake_gcpd]

I've been reading this series as it's been posted to the venom-pump community, but just wanted to leave a comment saying I'm missing it pretty badly now. I hope you continue it and there's an update soon. I've been enjoying the verse you've built up and the slow reveals of it. I really wanna know what happens to John and Bane! Plus, you know, finding fic for this ship is difficult right now. :(

[darlinglileve]

Thanks for letting me know how you feel! C: I'm really honored that you love my verse so far. I have worked a little bit on the fifth chapter, but unfortunately, my beta just up and disappeared on me. So I don't have anyone to really read over my story. I will be posting the next installment soon though. C:

[john_blake_gcpd]

Aww, thanks back at you! :} Bummer about the beta, thou. If you're still in need of one once the chapter's finished, I may have time for a quick look-over. I've beta'ed for a couple of friends. Either way, the news of a chapter 5 is very encouraging. :D Will do my best to be patient. ;)

[darlinglileve]

Thank you for volunteering! It's ok though, I'll just do the best I can with what I'm doing right now. If I get really needy for a beta, I'll send out an SOS to the venom pump community. The chapter should be out soon. C:

[darlinglileve]

It's not, honey. C:

[bowsie22]

Poor John, he was so damn close. I hope we find out soon why Bane is so fascinated by John. Can't wait for more =D