Aw, I would love for you to pimp this, but it would be good to wait until I get at least one more part done. I'm not way happy with the part-- it's an anomalous part, which I kind of need to establish the emotional stakes, but it's not characteristic of the other parts of I've outlines. it's too long, and most of it takes place in the character's heads. I'm thinking of cutting Draco's pov section in this entirely. Or moving it around so it doesn't break up Hermione's sections. Or making it its own separate part. argh.
Anyway the next part the two of them will be "interacting" (ahem) in the black void, which is more the point, more fun, and more what I would want pimped, really.
Ah, that was very enjoyable. Do you realize that it's 47 times as long as my drabble? Hee, well I'm glad I could inspire you to such heights, this is going to be a fantastic story.
Kermit pajamas- ha! That hermione is a girl after my own heart. Check my new icon.
This was never boring, and I really liked getting their perspectives, but I can see why you think it may be too long. Not that it is mind you, but I can see your concern
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Re: Very good!!!!darth_lunaJune 13 2006, 00:16:49 UTC
Wow. I can't believe this part made any sense at all without having read part one and two. I bow to your readerly skills.
oh there's *definitely* going to be a part 4-- I've already written bits of it. It's way more fun than this part-- Draco instructs Hermione in the contraceptive habits of the magical aristocracy, and there will be much snarky bantering. Plus ritual spell shagging! Thing is I've got an exchange story due in two weeks, though that I really should finish first. Erg. This is just more appealing to write, since it has none of the plot problems of my exchange fic. yrrgh.
Re: Very good!!!!darth_lunaJune 13 2006, 01:12:01 UTC
Nope... it says a lot about your skills as an author. :-)
Aw, shucks! Parts one and two are fun-- I love argosy's drabble (well, obviously, since I'm now writing a friggin' epic based on it). And part 4 will be fun too-- must have some more sex and snarking to relieve all this teen angst.
This was a lot of fun to read--I really enjoy your Hermione and your Draco and the wry humor you give this. And I love how you're using HBP to raise the stakes.
Re: Terrific!harmony_bitesJune 13 2006, 01:09:18 UTC
I'm thinking of cutting out the draco part entirely, or at least moving it around.
Since you're not posting this anywhere but your LJ for now, I'd reserve judgement till your finished--you might find it works better elsewhere or broken up. The reason I liked the Draco part is because it raises the stakes--we're reminded this is going on *during* HBP and exactly what that means.
And I need to credit Book of Shadows again in the acknowledgments.
I'd be honored, but I don't think you *have* to acknowledge things like that--if I did that for Book of Shadows myself, it would be a loooonggg list--lots of HG/SS stories inspired parts, or annoyed me so much I had to do different, or helped form ideas for my Snape. I don't really see much similarty between your fic and BOS, other than you're trying to work a romance between the lines
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That bothered me cuz she was the established author and I the newbie--I *knew* my story would get compared to hers, and that people would assume I copied her--and indeed, I've gotten a couple of comments on their similarity.
See, that sucks! I dunno, I always find that giving credit improves my karma. I can't understand why there are fen out there who don't credit, who steal or-- more incredibly but it does happen-- plagirize word for word. None of us are getting paid for this, it's all about community, it doesn't make sense not to acknowledge other's contributions.
Anyway, even if you don't see BOS, part 6's influence, I do, so I went ahead and added a line in the acknowlegments.
Plus, I'm gonna have to pimp your story to the snape community I belong to-- it deserves more readers!
Eee! I wish I had the energy to fangirl you in the way you deserve but forgive me because I took medicine with that wee little drowsy side effect. :)
Anyway! I loved this! Draco is just so... cynically cheerful if that makes any sense. I love your take on this. And Hermione's reaction to losing her virginity/not taking birth control/having sex with Malfoy issue was very in character and well done.
Can't wait to return to the black void (if only I had a black void of my own)!
No, it is not too long!patriciaormsbyJuly 13 2006, 15:32:11 UTC
Dear Shelley!
It has been forever since I have had a chance to check in. And I see it has been half-forever since you have. I sincerely pray for your good health!
Recently you have become my favorite author. The details that give life to your stories! Yes, I need to sit down when I have time to finish, but you really make it worthwhile. You flesh out the angst of adolescence--something I've forgotten about so long ago. You bring back those memories so well.
Re: No, it is not too long!darth_lunaJuly 16 2006, 17:23:39 UTC
Awww-- I hope your trip went well. My health (ahem) problems got worse, at the moment I'm on leave from work, back in the US staying with my parents, everything is kind of crazy and up in the air. But the rare moments I get to log on to the internet and check LJ is one of things that keeps me going!
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Haven't read this, will as soon as I take a break from my own exchange misery.
AND, answer me this time. Do you mind if I pimp this is my journal? If you want to keep a bit quiet that's okay too. Just let me know.
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Anyway the next part the two of them will be "interacting" (ahem) in the black void, which is more the point, more fun, and more what I would want pimped, really.
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Kermit pajamas- ha! That hermione is a girl after my own heart. Check my new icon.
This was never boring, and I really liked getting their perspectives, but I can see why you think it may be too long. Not that it is mind you, but I can see your concern ( ... )
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Is there going to be a part 4??? Do I have a long wait??
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oh there's *definitely* going to be a part 4-- I've already written bits of it. It's way more fun than this part-- Draco instructs Hermione in the contraceptive habits of the magical aristocracy, and there will be much snarky bantering. Plus ritual spell shagging! Thing is I've got an exchange story due in two weeks, though that I really should finish first. Erg. This is just more appealing to write, since it has none of the plot problems of my exchange fic. yrrgh.
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Nope... it says a lot about your skills as an author. :-)
I just read one and two.. (Wow, very good!) and part 3 does make more sense now. LOL!
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Aw, shucks! Parts one and two are fun-- I love argosy's drabble (well, obviously, since I'm now writing a friggin' epic based on it). And part 4 will be fun too-- must have some more sex and snarking to relieve all this teen angst.
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Since you're not posting this anywhere but your LJ for now, I'd reserve judgement till your finished--you might find it works better elsewhere or broken up. The reason I liked the Draco part is because it raises the stakes--we're reminded this is going on *during* HBP and exactly what that means.
And I need to credit Book of Shadows again in the acknowledgments.
I'd be honored, but I don't think you *have* to acknowledge things like that--if I did that for Book of Shadows myself, it would be a loooonggg list--lots of HG/SS stories inspired parts, or annoyed me so much I had to do different, or helped form ideas for my Snape. I don't really see much similarty between your fic and BOS, other than you're trying to work a romance between the lines ( ... )
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See, that sucks! I dunno, I always find that giving credit improves my karma. I can't understand why there are fen out there who don't credit, who steal or-- more incredibly but it does happen-- plagirize word for word. None of us are getting paid for this, it's all about community, it doesn't make sense not to acknowledge other's contributions.
Anyway, even if you don't see BOS, part 6's influence, I do, so I went ahead and added a line in the acknowlegments.
Plus, I'm gonna have to pimp your story to the snape community I belong to-- it deserves more readers!
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Anyway! I loved this! Draco is just so... cynically cheerful if that makes any sense. I love your take on this. And Hermione's reaction to losing her virginity/not taking birth control/having sex with Malfoy issue was very in character and well done.
Can't wait to return to the black void (if only I had a black void of my own)!
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It has been forever since I have had a chance to check in. And I see it has been half-forever since you have. I sincerely pray for your good health!
Recently you have become my favorite author. The details that give life to your stories! Yes, I need to sit down when I have time to finish, but you really make it worthwhile. You flesh out the angst of adolescence--something I've forgotten about so long ago. You bring back those memories so well.
Health and happiness to you!
Pat
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