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fic: The King is Dead, All Hail the King - Loyalty to the King

May 02, 2012 14:13

Title: The King is Dead, All Hail the King: Loyalty to the King
Author: darthbatgirl
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I own nothing
Characters: Jason, Alfred, Tim
Summary: There is some tension between Jason and the new King
Word Count: 875
Warnings: angst
A/N: Written for heartslogos on tumblr who had asked for more King Tim. I've re-written this a couple of times ( Read more... )

tim, jason, series: hail to the king, alfred

Comments 7

eternal_moonie May 2 2012, 19:46:06 UTC

WOOHOO!!!!

So nice to see a new chapter of this series!

darthbatgirl May 2 2012, 23:13:44 UTC

So glad you liked this one! :)

larsinger29 May 2 2012, 20:10:05 UTC

Alfred is eternally wise, and it's a good thing that Jason listened to him! You did a wonderful job portraying the way Jason's grief made him react to Tim's ascent to the thrown. I like the parallels he drew between Tim and Bruce to make him see, perhaps, the error in his thinking. Of course, the guiding hand of Alfred never hurts either!

Terrific character piece on Jason in this 'verse. Gives us great insight into his position and his thoughts/emotions on the situation he finds himself in. Very well done!

darthbatgirl May 2 2012, 23:21:24 UTC

Everyone listens to Alfred if they are smart. I'm glad Jason's grief was coming through. The flow was getting all choppy . . but I think I finally got it okay.

Even through his grief Jason could see the similaries between Bruce and Tim, he just needed Alfred to help out.

I'm so glad you liked this part. :D

dungeonwriter May 3 2012, 00:56:42 UTC

I love this universe, I love how beautifully you write this, this could be original fiction and it's still so DC.

Just one sentence was a bit odd to me.

"An act that anywhere else would have landed him in the dungeons any place else."

Do you need both any else?

darthbatgirl May 3 2012, 01:45:16 UTC

Oh thank you so much. You know I had thought of dropping the DC influence on this but then I kind of chickened out besides I thought it would be easier to keep the DC influence with the up romantic (or not so romantic in some cases) relationships that Tim will be faced with.

And thank you for pointing that out to me, the second one definitely wasn't needed and has been fixed.

dungeonwriter May 3 2012, 01:54:13 UTC

You know, you can rewrite the DC out once you get more comfortable. I won't tell if you won't! I'm thinking of taking a character to help you, because it's so fun.

And thanks for not being mad, I wasn't sure if you wanted that!

What a beautiful story!