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thefireisblack August 4 2007, 02:41:40 UTC
A couple of nitpicks:

male goddesses
Either they're female gods or they're goddesses.

while Hera was asleep next to her baby Hercules
Unless you're going off the Disney version, Heracles (Hercules is Roman) was the son of the mortal Alcmene and Zeus. Hera hated Heracles even though he was named for her (his name means glory of Hera) and made him go through hell over and over again. Though to be fair, in the original version, Heracles was a jerk. I don't know what else to call a guy who comes in and abuses a host's good graces and then ends the night by raping the daughter -_-

But if you're going off your own interpretation, then disregard the fact that Hera did care about Zeus dallying with every young thing he found. Then again, can't blame her after all the work he did in wooing her.

Pass that, reading this makes me want to smack Poseidon and Zeus a good one. Bloody hypocrites. I liked the twist in how you put Calypso cutting the relationship off as to not harm them both. The road to hell is paved with good intentions after all.

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deepseasiren August 6 2007, 03:08:42 UTC
You know, I don't even remember writing that story. I noticed that it was written in an out of whack way. I had this theme in my head and I must have taken those sleeping pills, because this story is actually really BAD. I just got a chance to reread it now, and I'm cringing. I'm gonna have to delete it and start all over again.

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deepseasiren August 6 2007, 03:09:29 UTC
Ugh. It was written at 3:09am in the morning. Yes, I was on the Ambien throes then. Don't ever pay any attention to any writing I do after 2am.

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thefireisblack August 6 2007, 03:39:27 UTC
Aye, aye, mon capiton! Though for someone who was sleeptyping (sort of) you made almost no spelling mistakes. That's impressive.

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