Comments | dawnbluewings: PPC Mission 3: The Ring of Artemis.

dawnbluewings

PPC Mission 3: The Ring of Artemis.

Jul 22, 2009 01:42

Title: THE RING OF ARTEMIS
Author: Brown Eyed Girl17
Rating: M
Obligatory linkage: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2536173/1/The_Ring_of_Artemis
Mission by: dawnbluewings, as Agent Rose/Ross
Notes: This story was the only Tamora Pierce/Lord of the Rings crossover on the Pit. I ( Read more... )

mission, rose/ross, ppc

Comments 9

dracorn_adagio July 23 2009, 15:09:42 UTC

While I am of the opinion that any crossover can work with sufficient writing skill, this is not how one goes about it. Good job on killing it.

Ross is rather bloodthirsty, isn't he? Still, I can't say the Stu didn't deserve it.

dawnbluewings July 23 2009, 17:49:38 UTC

Any crossover can work, just like any story can work. (Well. Maybe not any. Elven ladies. Orcs. Just no.) But seeing things like this will probably scare (Or scar, for that matter) anyone with the thought in their head of writing one away from doing so...

And the thing is that Ross really... ISN'T that bloodthirsty under normal circumstances. He's usually the calm one. He just gets touchy on the subject of "The male twin" Stus. And, for that matter, turning favorite characters into ninnies. And then, well... Stus get written to death.

Note that even I am completely unsure whether the "I" in Ross's deadly sentence was talking about the Stu, or himself...

lady_rilwen July 25 2009, 14:39:59 UTC

You misspelled Masbolle as Mesbolle in one sentence, and you repeatedly replaced Mindelan with Mindalen. Please fix these things. ;)
Other than that, good.

dawnbluewings July 25 2009, 17:41:07 UTC

Whoops... Fixed now. Thanks for the heads-up! :D

Note to self: In future, proofread four times, with a copy of the book in hand... Particularly when your Beta is as tired as you are.

lady_rilwen July 25 2009, 18:04:05 UTC

Also, your 'the prospect was worrying' etc, 'the' should have been capitalised. ;)

lady_rilwen July 26 2009, 02:28:37 UTC

Oh, and one more. Chisakami does not have a stupid name. What she does have, is a stolen canon name. Princess Chisakami was the Yamani Princess that Prince Roald was to marry, but she died in the earthquake, and therefore they sent Shinkokami instead. You may want to amend your charge-list.

*is armed with very good memory for written things, and copies of the books*

Thread 7