and we will possess

[dayadhvam_triad]

More than two weeks of scribbling, editing, tweaking, and sitting on this thing--pffffft. IT IS DONE. /collapses

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Title: and we will possess
Fandom: Supernatural
Rating/Pairings: PG. Gen.
Word Count: ~5100
Summary: Amelia stopped praying, among other things.
Notes: Written for the 2010 femgenficathon VI round; prompt #77: Lucretia Mott--We too often bind

Comments

[daylightfire]

It's great to read something that fills things in from the Novak family's POV. Heartbreaking story. Gorgeous imagery. I love how you show how Amelia's feeling by the little things she does and the way she does things.

[dayadhvam_triad]

I feel that for the Novaks, who have led fairly normal lives before all of this, it's the seemingly small and insignificant changes in their life that frame the gaping "hi, heaven and hell just landed on your doorstep" shock. Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. :)

[kalliel]

You posted it! :D

This is going to sound really lame, but the paragraph break you added in--right before the description of the ropes on the chair and the blood on the floor--worked really well. It draws attention straight to those images and even though I knew they were coming, they were vivid and intense and definitely memorable.

I still love all the little mundane details in this, in particular the scene that's describing the small changes Amelia has made to their lives and their home. I told you that before, but I figured, hey, why not put that opinion out in the open?

And that last scene! The way Amelia's phone conversation with Dr. Mallory led into her conversation with Castiel--the crashing together of her neighborly old life and the intrusive fingers of angels and the Apocalypse and Lucifer--was beautiful.

I loved the tissue bit. It's the little things, it really is. And Amelia's reaction to news of Jimmy's actual death (especially her mentions of having canceled his credit cards and boxed up his things--ugh! <3)

[dayadhvam_triad]

(OT, but your icon = 8DDDD!)

And thank YOU for your advice! :D I changed it and thought, Yes, this definitely makes a difference, whee~ :)

I'm glad the last scene worked. I still have reservations about the way I shifted from Amelia to Claire's appearance in the scene, but I wanted to avoid the long introspective paragraphs I'd used earlier in the fic and show Amelia's mental numbness/blankness by absence of words (and thus, absence of conscious thought).

That's why episode 4.20 struck such a chord with me. Besides the creepily wonderful acting of Claire!Castiel and Misha Collins's transitions between Castiel and Jimmy (his faces were completely different, I was honestly weirded out lol), the collateral damage is something that isn't touched on very much. Jimmy led a normal life and got caught up with the thought that he could help do something important for heaven, what with the whole this is the most important thing in my life line, but he surely came to regret that. And the consequences are never going to end. Sam and Dean have

[kalliel]

(#callcastiel when it looks like the Apocalypse is dawning! It will help! I believe Amelia believes differently, aha.)

That first scene in 4x20 where Jimmy is eating a hamburger (I think?) and Sam and Dean are staring at him and his not-Castiel-ness was fabulous.

If you watch the series in a certain mindset, the actual horror that's inflicted on these guest-star/extra families is pretty intense. (Obviously the canon doesn't do a particularly good job of playing up this angle, but I don't suppose it endeavors to do so. XD) This fic elaborated on that feeling and put words and moments to it very beautifully.

I'm glad you felt my comments were useful! Though the loveliness of this fic is entirely your own doing, I assure you. :)

[dayadhvam_triad]

(oh noes! I'm going to be late to a meeting! #callcastiel, teleport me! voila~ Yeah, Amelia would not be so quick to call on him though.)

LOL I know! Also the moment near the end of the episode, where MC switches from bleeding Jimmy on the ground to blank Castiel just like that. I always wonder what happens to the guest-star-characters once their experience is over; probably much more jumpy and feeling more disconnected from those around them.

♥!

[liliaeth]

I love seeing things from a different pov. Poor Amelia, poor Claire...

[dayadhvam_triad]

Thank you for commenting :) Poor Novaks indeed. :(

[dossier]

I'm pretty sure that it's not truly possible to write the Novaks without some level of angst. Amelia and Claire, their journey & grief & guilt are beautifully drawn here.

[dayadhvam_triad]

The Novaks had it hard, especially as they never knew what they were getting into in the first place. :( Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

[angels_rest]

Even though you killed Jimmy off (He's alive, I tell you!), I quite liked this look at what happened post "The Rapture."

Lots of good lines and nice touches. The bit about measured gaits. Castiel handing Amelia a tissue. The line about the sight burning the faith out of them. All the bits with the salt - especially the unspoken line about the spare salt. The small looks at their old life, before Castiel came calling. Castiel coming to tell them what happened to Jimmy.

A lovely, lovely fic. (I'm so glad someone remembered the Novaks!)

[dayadhvam_triad]

I want Jimmy to be alive, but I don't know if the show's ever going to revisit the Novaks, and after all that's happened I'm really beginning to think he's gone. :(

I'm glad you liked it! --especially the "sight burning the faith out of them," which was a figurative play on what literally happened to Pamela. I'm quite happy that you picked up on that. :) Thank you for commenting!