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[Fic] Eyeshield 21 - This Part

Dec 25, 2011 00:06

Title: This Part
Author: dayofcaligula
Ratings/Warnings: K, Karin's musings, lighthearted.
Pairing/Character(s): Unsui Kongo/Karin Koizumi
Fandom: Eyeshield 21
Disclaimer: I don't own Eyeshield 21 or any of its characters.
Summary: There was a subtle conflict in Karin's mind on how she is finally seeing her friendship with Unsui.
A/N: Timeline for this story is ( Read more... )

fanfic, es21, unsuikarin

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cherry_tiger December 25 2011, 08:40:29 UTC

Aww, I love it! I was thinking there probably should be more fic of how they developed before they got together (still working on that idea) and you didn't disappoint with this one. You can tell Karin is uncertain about things, but by the end of it, she seems content and certain. Simple, comforting and downright cute, the way you make these two talk with each other is exactly why I now adore this pairing so much.

dayofcaligula December 25 2011, 10:07:21 UTC

I only had Karin's POV, but I hope Unsui's uncertainty over this can be felt in the story as well. I also had him attempting to finally hinting his frustrations/worries with Agon to Karin, a start of an opening.

Oh, their conversation continues in my head (this is happening while they are running):

"When we get there, let's see who complains on whose idea was this in the first place."

"You don't get to run in the rain that often."

"I won't get sick, but you might. See, you're all wet. I don't think protein can defend you against this cold."

"Are you still cold?"

"No, no! Let's get back to you..."

"I don't want to depend on medicine, but if this comes to that I might have to take some then."

.... etc. But I had to have that kind of impact in my ending, so I had to end it there.

Btw, happy xmas!

cherry_tiger December 26 2011, 17:16:04 UTC

Oh, I definitely noticed it! And I like how subtle it was in the actual conversation too, like it was so normal and you could miss it if you weren't paying attention.

Oh man, you REALLY have their conversations done so well. You're making me love this pairing more and more, especially with how frank they can be with each other, and how casual their conversations are. Seriously, thank you so much for this lovely insight on them!

And yes, Happy Christmas to you too! Hope you had a lovely one!

dayofcaligula December 27 2011, 11:06:42 UTC

And, there's also Karin testing the subject by generalizing it like what Unsui did. She knows that he knows that she knows what he meant. She's letting him do it on his own. In this story, for now, he didn't pursue it. Eventually, of course, he will tell her everything.

Also, the two of them love compromise. It was something that they discovered in their friendship along the way. With Unsui being Unsui, Karin has to find her ways to lessen his burden. When their relationship develops, it becomes a synergy, which I find to be very beautifulI am also thinking that their personalities causes their only problem: Unsui not being comfortable having Karin helping around when he knows he can do it on his own (and it disrupts his individuality/insert-Buddha-here). Karin, on the other hand, is challenged by her love of preoccupation. She didn't feel quite at ease at the fact that Unsui is now a part of it, something/someone so constant and something/someone that wouldn't change, like a detour to her unending maze - a glitch in her search for ( ... )

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