The repeating of phrase "so she didn't kill herself that afternoon" would only be interesting if it were worked effectively into a poetic form like the villanelle, but it isn't; it is merely repeated to an effect lost on the reader. The last line is truly atrocious.
I really couldn't agree much more on pretty much all of what you said, mostly what I quoted above. I read it, and it's not that I think it's bad, really, just nothing all that special. By special I mean, if you're going with it being a fully prestigious publication, it's terribly normal and if the poet did intend some deep down metaphor, it's terribly hidden in crap.
So no, I really don't think you're missing anything. Definitely post some more work if you could. I honestly don't recognize her name at all, nor would I know where to look for more stuff aside from a Google search.
Let's put this into context. Insufferable ennui. Fashionable melancholy. Staring out the window of your appartment at the pigeons and the young lovers kissing under the tree. Just you and your cat, Manfred. The dwarf Schefflera may need to be moved to the kitchen window this time of year. And, oh, what to wear?
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I really couldn't agree much more on pretty much all of what you said, mostly what I quoted above. I read it, and it's not that I think it's bad, really, just nothing all that special. By special I mean, if you're going with it being a fully prestigious publication, it's terribly normal and if the poet did intend some deep down metaphor, it's terribly hidden in crap.
So no, I really don't think you're missing anything. Definitely post some more work if you could. I honestly don't recognize her name at all, nor would I know where to look for more stuff aside from a Google search.
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