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[dayremer]

Ok, so I reformatted the story. Now it starts out with Jessica. Nothing is changed in the actual writing, I just moved her chunk of story. She makes the presentation the day before the rest of the story. I made a line so you can see where the story picks up from last time. Is this format better or worse?

I enter the meeting room and place my

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[mute_nation]

this is all of it?
how does it look formatted on document
lj is ugly

[dayremer]

It is so beautiful in Microsoft Word. So you're saying it looks too short. I'll see if I can mess with the lj format.

[mute_nation]

formatting on the page is somewhat important, depending on the text
if it isnt or has no affect or relation to teh text then it doesnt
being in an lj post has another feel to it
if you have another edit or addition, could you email me it instead?
kthx

I think this formatting...

[safiersephiroth]

...works much better than the original. The switches are clear and easy to follow. Good fix.

Re: I think this formatting...

[dayremer]

Fantastic.