As promised, here is part 3 of the on going adventures of the pencil punx. It didn't turn out as great as I had hoped,but it isn't bad. I think things are developing pretty well as a whole.
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Thanks, I don't judge my work on anything but it's artistic merit. I know where my weaknesses lay, I couldn't comedically write myself out of a wet paper bag. Paper bags are weaker when they are wet right? I've never checked.
It's not that you're a bad comedic writer. This is a transitional page that is continuing a story line so it doesn't necessarily require a punch line. Though that brings up a good point. Is this a "serial" comic where each page is released seperately and therefore needs to stand alone, or is the ultimate idea to release it as a collective work like a published comic book?
Commenting purely on the art work, you've got backgrounds (pretty detailed ones too for the size you're working at), varied expressions, a lot of color....really good stuff. I'm definitely impressed, I don't think I could do much better even if I tried. WHEN I try, rather.
you know, I'm not sure anymore. The concept started as a serial, then I started making it like a collective comic, but I have been presenting it as a serial. For a while I was making this for our compilation, but I don't know if the story line is strong enough considering it's length. I need someone to write a couple good jokes in here, then maybe it could work. Solid art and average writing is pretty garden variety, and that won't take me anywhere.
I saw that you posted more anthropomorphic characters in the Photobucket account. Does this mean you haven't given up? Good. I tried drawing my own rhino man. It was hard as fuck, and turned out pretty weak so don't feel bad.
Damn you for posting a better version of my own drawing, on my live journal. Yours was obviously a more realistic looking attempt. When I did mine I was thinking along the lines of the Rat and Cat that you did, slightly cartoonier. As for the posted animals, those all suck, save for the lion, I really like the lion. I never actually gave up on it, I just was really proud of the Rhino, but you critical bastards knocked me down a peg. I mayb throw the Koala and Border Terrier I did in the bucket later.
Us being critical bastards is a good thing. You should never fall too in love with your designs as it blinds you to your own weaknesses. Not everyone's advice will always be good, or in line with your ultimate vision, but you can sort the constructive from the useless via your own judgement. In this case, we weren't knocking your drawing, because it's a good drawing, we were just saying that if you're going to use a rhino, might as well play to it's defining characterstics and emphasize it's bulk. Didn't mean to offend you and if you want to use it anyway then by all means go ahead. It's your project, all I did was draw a cat with goggles.
As for my rhino, I actually thought it was equally cartoony to the cat. Then again, in my mind a man with a rhino's head couldn't NOT look like a cartoon.
Don't get discouraged by our trivial comments. You just have to expect taking crap from the peanut gallery when you post your work in a public forum.
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Commenting purely on the art work, you've got backgrounds (pretty detailed ones too for the size you're working at), varied expressions, a lot of color....really good stuff. I'm definitely impressed, I don't think I could do much better even if I tried. WHEN I try, rather.
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As for my rhino, I actually thought it was equally cartoony to the cat. Then again, in my mind a man with a rhino's head couldn't NOT look like a cartoon.
Don't get discouraged by our trivial comments. You just have to expect taking crap from the peanut gallery when you post your work in a public forum.
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then again I've read about 20 comics in my life and my opinion is some dookie.
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