sorry it took so long, heres the poem I wrote...I thought it was pretty good but every time I read it it seems to get worse,honest opinions would help, thanx
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Awww, you're my favorite little emo brother EVER! :P I really like the poem- the rhyme scheme could use a little work and there isn't a constant rhythm, but I love the idea. I hope that helps and isn't discouraging. I love you bro, and I hope your Valentines was more eventful than mine.
P.S. I wannnnnna see your haircut!!! Fix the computer! Fix the computer NOW! :)
awesome poem... i like how it was completely random... everything from the words, to the length of sentences, to the rhyming... it's a diff. writing style - and if that's what you intended then it rocked... only thing is, i'd change " Strike-out’s number more than three. " to just "Strike-out" without the 's... seemed more choppy like the rest of the poem... rock on bro rock on
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I really like the poem- the rhyme scheme could use a little work and there isn't a constant rhythm, but I love the idea.
I hope that helps and isn't discouraging.
I love you bro, and I hope your Valentines was more eventful than mine.
P.S. I wannnnnna see your haircut!!!
Fix the computer! Fix the computer NOW!
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