Your combined brilliance kills me DED. So dead that the 'a' key on my keyboard spontaneously misfunctions. Don't you think that 'misfunction' would look better as 'mysfunction', just like 'dysfunction'?
You may ask, 'why the y?' and the anwer, of course, is 'y not?' Either that, or I've eaten contaminated Frosted Flakes whose sugary sweetness is melting into the already-warped portions of cerebral cortex.
Needless to say, I LOVE YOU LIKE THE MAD WONDERFUL PEOPLE YOU ARE. Jaida/Copperbadge is now on my interest list. (Or is it Copperbadge/Jaida? I can't really remember.)
I'm still getting used to the name 'Felix'. I keep associating it with the cat, and particularly with those creepy wall-clocks made after him. I imagine that, eventually, I will adjust. He was a cool cat.
One tiny nitpick, though: Portia had once pondered, after Felix has passed through the living room on his way to a club dressed entirely in leather... Shouldn't it be "had passed"?
Joudeau, or Jodeau? You've got both going on there. and, ahem, Malo? And Félix has lost his accent.
But I don't care, because this is starting really well -- better than the original Rebuilding Ozymandias I feel, which took a little more time to take off --, and now I am really impatient to read the rest. You know, I think you guys work better with characters that you and your potential readers already know, because you can cut the "bloody hell, how on earth are we going to introduce them" bit and go straight into the story (which you might want consider doing anyway, and let the readers find out as they discover the story).
And "Except the load-bearing ones," Oscar muttered. The idea of knocking out all the walls was one he'd dealt with before, and it kept him awake at nights. *snickers* That would keep me awake at nights too.
Ooer, Joudeau, and Malo. *fixes* I meant to fix that and then forgot. With regards to Felix's accent, we're having a hard enough time remembering to call him Felix, we just forgot to do a search-and-replace. Hopefully we'll remember for the next chapter *grin* Thanks for the fixes!
It really is rather like writing fanfic -- we're finding the characters come a lot easier :)
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You may ask, 'why the y?' and the anwer, of course, is 'y not?' Either that, or I've eaten contaminated Frosted Flakes whose sugary sweetness is melting into the already-warped portions of cerebral cortex.
Needless to say, I LOVE YOU LIKE THE MAD WONDERFUL PEOPLE YOU ARE. Jaida/Copperbadge is now on my interest list. (Or is it Copperbadge/Jaida? I can't really remember.)
I'm still getting used to the name 'Felix'. I keep associating it with the cat, and particularly with those creepy wall-clocks made after him. I imagine that, eventually, I will adjust. He was a cool cat.
But not as cool as Felix Cavell
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Donna Karan.
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One tiny nitpick, though: Portia had once pondered, after Felix has passed through the living room on his way to a club dressed entirely in leather... Shouldn't it be "had passed"?
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But I don't care, because this is starting really well -- better than the original Rebuilding Ozymandias I feel, which took a little more time to take off --, and now I am really impatient to read the rest. You know, I think you guys work better with characters that you and your potential readers already know, because you can cut the "bloody hell, how on earth are we going to introduce them" bit and go straight into the story (which you might want consider doing anyway, and let the readers find out as they discover the story).
And "Except the load-bearing ones," Oscar muttered. The idea of knocking out all the walls was one he'd dealt with before, and it kept him awake at nights. *snickers* That would keep me awake at nights too.
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It really is rather like writing fanfic -- we're finding the characters come a lot easier :)
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*dies* That is so Portia. Oh, Portia, I've missed you! I've missed you veryvery much!
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