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Jul 30, 2007 21:34
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Peer edit, version 2 - What do you think?
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rahnia
July 31 2007, 03:32:21 UTC
I think this is better! Do you? I feel like it's more about YOU, it's more engaging. For me, at least, you could still be a little more specific and a little less abstract, but I know you're working in limited time and space.
Good luck again : )
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Good luck again : )
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