Any input por favor?

[deadinside04]

I am not posting this story to be pretentious. I just really want some input on this. If it sucks, then tell me it sucks, if there are things you like, then let me know. I just want to keep improving on this:

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[spamspamspam]

oooo i really liked it. i'm no good at writing so i'm not gonna critique, but it was really good. great job.

(you also slipped some porno in there... way to go!)

just kidding about that last part there.

haha

i win

ok the end now.