Rewriting the Rules, Chapter 4/? (PG-13, Gen)

[deansfangirl]

link back to Chapter Three

Chapter Four
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Tuesday

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Everyone was quiet the next morning.  Gibbs didn't even comment on the new coffee maker.  Tony knew he'd throw it out after the Winchesters left, but he was grateful for it while it lasted.

"DNA results should be in around noon," his boss said on his way out.  "I'll call you."  Tony

Comments

[sunshinewerwolf]

loved it! you really are capturing each of the characters very well :)

[deansfangirl]

wow, thanks! this section was pretty easy to write :-)

[jpgr]

I look forward to every chapter. Oh, how you desribed Tony's feelings about the photo got me a little teary

[dinalori]

Great chapter! I feel so bad for Tony, he's worked so hard all his life to build up his career and now it's all over. Gah! From the way Abby reacted to Kate's death and Tony's "death" when his car blew up I can only imagine how she's handling this.

The photo was very touching, at least he gets to have something to remember his team by. And, of course, he can still talk to Gibbs. Can't wait to see how they both react to a hunt. (I'm writing a similar scene right now with Methos and Joe. Civilians and hunting are definately, as Buffy would say, non-mixy things.)

Just wanted to point out a couple of things: when Tony and Dean are sparring, "The hunger didn't seem to mind" I think you meant to write "hunter" not "hunger." And Rule #4 is "The best way to keep a secret? Keep it to yourself. Second best? Tell one other person." #6 is Never say "You're Sorry." As far as I can remember (and I've Googled it to be sure) there is no rule #19. Did you mean #11 "When the job is done, walk away"?

o_0 Wow, I guess I *do* know Gibbs' rules.

[deansfangirl]

you? totally ROCK!! :-) thanks so much for catching my mistakes!!! i'm in too much of a hurry to finish that i'm not re-reading and fact-checking as much as i know i should. so i really appreciate you helping!

[dinalori]

You're welcome. I'm always hesitant about pointing out errors; I don't want to come across as a know-it-all or nit-picker.

I tend to be obsessive about making sure my fics are as fact and canon perfect as possible (to the point of checking weather reports for the time/area I'm writing about. I know. I need help. lol)

[jebbypal]

Really enjoying this fic. Thoughtful setup, characters all in voice. Will be interesting to see Tony and Gibbs on a hunt

[deansfangirl]

thanks so much! I'm working on that chapter now! :-) real life sure gets in the way too much, kwim?