Comments | dearygirl: red light, green light

dearygirl

red light, green light

Nov 28, 2010 19:51

Pairing: Jeff/Annie
Spoilers: Through 2.09
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 1296
Disclaimer: I still don't own Community.
Description: Post-Blanket Fort Collapse 2010

Author's Note: The plethora of lovely fics that have been posted since 2.09 aired has filled my little heart with a lot of joy. This is me throwing my hat into the ring. I hope you enjoy.

( The blankets fall, a single sheet drifting over them in pink-hued dome of seclusion. )

community, fanfiction, jeff/annie

Comments 49

veritas724 November 29 2010, 04:17:21 UTC

I may have screamed a little when I saw that you'd posted a fanfic ;) This one is amazing, I loved that you continued it past the fort itself! And--

She wants, she wants, she wants…

I can't articulate why, but that's my favorite line in this story for some reason. It's just so perfect for her narrative.

dearygirl December 2 2010, 05:59:34 UTC

Aww. Thank you so much.

I liked that line too. As simple as it is. I feel like it sums up a huge part of who Annie is.

I'm glad you liked it! Thank you again.

justine_88 November 29 2010, 04:20:56 UTC

first, he should have put the car in park. tsk tsk jeff. second ... love the story; simple & fun. and i think they should have left pierce stranded; it would only be the humane thing to do :)

dearygirl December 2 2010, 06:01:08 UTC

Haha, Jeff was clearly not thinking about safety in this moment.

Thank you so much for the comment!

westwingwolf November 29 2010, 04:21:33 UTC

I love everything about this! So well written, and great use of tension. Love the fact that they make out so long the light changes often. So great!

blithers November 29 2010, 04:45:28 UTC

Agh!! No kidding, this is exactly how I pictured the moment after the fort collapsed - that Jeff would kiss Annie on the cheek or temple and that the moment would be quickly over.

Get out of my brain.

But, better than that, then you had them MAKE OUT! I will never complain when even more kissing is involved.

dearygirl December 2 2010, 06:06:53 UTC

Heehee, I will basically look for any excuse to have Jeff and Annie make out.

What I love about the way the show ended with the collapsing of the blanket fort is that ANYTHING could have happened next. And I'd like to think that SOMETHING happened. (Of course they couldn't actually show it because it they had my television would have exploded from the AWESOME/CUTE/HOTNESS overload.)

Thank you again! I'm glad you liked it!

treblebeth November 29 2010, 04:55:07 UTC

I love this, and was so glad to see you had decided to tackle Post-Blanket Fort Collapse 2010 :) As always, I particularly like your phrasing. The way you word things creates this very tangible atmosphere. Even while the tension builds, there is still this surreal dreamy quality to everything -the combination of which I think is totally accurate following the day they've had... Wow, those comments make me sound slightly drunk, when I'm only really tired. I hope you understand what I meant. Which is that I loved it! Thanks!

lightningmoon09 November 29 2010, 05:55:51 UTC

My brain read your comment in a Luna Lovegood voice and it was hilarious.

treblebeth November 29 2010, 06:07:43 UTC

yesss, well played. I shall now post exclusively using the dulcet tones of Luna Lovegood.

lightningmoon09 November 29 2010, 06:10:23 UTC

Yippee! This feels like a victory for everybody

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