Comments | dee_aar2: They Said It Could Not Be Done.

dee_aar2

They Said It Could Not Be Done.

Feb 06, 2016 21:23

I woke up. The day seemed like any other even though for some reason it didn't feel like it. The sun streamed through the sheer curtains in my room facing the eastern hemisphere and onto my face. Unusually for me , today I enjoyed the sun's tender caress across my face. A smile dawned. And that was unusual too. I normally woke up to Mum's ( Read more... )

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whipchick February 8 2016, 11:27:43 UTC

"I should do more of this ... the cooking, the-helping-Mum-without-being-asked ... and oh yes the smiling too."

The word "atypically" stuck out for me a bit - made it harder to judge her age, which I think was teenage?

How sad, that she could only feel like she wanted to be part of her life after she'd left - this was very thought-provoking.

dee_aar2 February 13 2016, 01:29:34 UTC

Hmmm ... " Atypically " ... Yuppp I did intend her to be teenage. I used to think it is one of the toughest ages to be in .. until I passed all the ages beyond that and had the same conclusion about every age.

Suicide is sad and unnecessary. Life could be beautiful if we tried to understand it.

murielle February 8 2016, 16:47:26 UTC

I knew where you were taking us, yet I wanted, hoped, it would end differently. I really like the way you show that the things she was upset about would actually have worked out if only she had lived.

A very insightful examination of the truth and results of suicide.

dee_aar2 February 13 2016, 01:30:33 UTC

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and comment. I really do appreciate it. Glad you could connect to it in some way.

sinnamongirl February 8 2016, 17:51:36 UTC

Oh, you know, I didn't even get what was going on til the very end. Good job on that! Very poignant way to discuss suicide. Good job!

dee_aar2 February 13 2016, 01:31:21 UTC

Thank you so much for the appreciative words. It makes my day to know you dropped by and read and commented.

misfitmanor February 8 2016, 18:23:04 UTC

There were so many clues in this telling the reader what was really going on, just like I feel like there are so many clues in real life when a person is this close to such a difficult choice, that one only realizes after the fact have been tuned out, and you've done a great job of paralleling that same sense of helplessness on the other side as well, which is an impressive feat. Great job with this.

dee_aar2 February 13 2016, 01:32:49 UTC

Heyyy ... thank you so much for dropping by to read and penning your thoughts about the writing. So happy to know that my intent of invoking the reader's emotions were successful.

prog_schlock February 8 2016, 21:08:38 UTC

I suspected the main character was a ghost, but didn't think she'd committed suicide. It makes sense and this seems to reflect the reality that suicide attempt survivors usually discuss. Have you seen The Bridge? Its a documentary about suicide off of the Golden Gate Bridge. I'm paraphrasing here, but one thing a survivor of the leap says is that the moment he leaped off the bridge was the moment that he realized every problem in his life could be solved except the problem he'd created by leaping off. It was a powerful moment for me - I struggle with depression and thoughts of suicide and that guys' words (albeit not the exact words) have remained with me. Yet another reason to go on living - it might not always get better, but we can deal with the problems while we're alive ( ... )

dee_aar2 February 13 2016, 01:34:57 UTC

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I have had thoughts too and what stops me are the words similar to what stops/stopped you too. Hugs. I know things can be better ... I just have to keep travelling. And that momentary moment passes... till now. Thank you for sharing the video ... as always .. new to me and beautiful.