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Ikaros - Chapter I

Sep 19, 2011 00:16

Title: Ikaros - Chapter I
Author: deepseabed
Pairing: Belldom
Rating: Story: PG-13 - NC-17 / This chapter: PG-13
Warnings: Angst. Sort of fantasy.
Summary: Something strange happens to Matt.
Disclaimer: It's all fantasy. It happens only in my dreams.
Beta: Chantal. Thank you so much. :)
Feedback: Anything will be loved. ♥

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belldom, ikaros, fiction

Comments 19

eskarlata September 19 2011, 02:31:27 UTC

Oh...where is he? What is his problem?

I like this, seems very interesting. I like the title too :)

And congrats for your first series!

deepseabed September 20 2011, 03:57:40 UTC

I wondered if I should warn readers about the key of the story, when I posted. But I decided against it, because I don't want to be a spoilsport. So, we'll see...

Thank you so much for the sweet words! <3

thekeyholder September 19 2011, 09:43:52 UTC

When I browsed my f-list yesterday evening, I became very excited to see a new story from you, but the title also stirred something in me. I have a really good feeling about this story!

If Matthew had been born to play music, Dominic must have been born to meet him. Love him. Protect him.

^Oh god, I loved this part! The whole text has an air of mystery, so I can't wait to read more! <3

deepseabed September 20 2011, 04:05:44 UTC

Awww, you're so sweet. <3 Thank you! *hugs*

Yes, the title. When I was writing this first chapter, I named the document "Icarus", but I decided to use "Ikaros" instead. I really love this title myself. :)

That part you mentioned was also my favourite. I'm so glad to hear you liked it!

Thank you so much for reading and telling me those lovely words. <3

starlight_myth September 19 2011, 10:31:06 UTC

Story aside... WHOA! It's so good to see you posting again! And a series? Even better.

Coming back...
I love the narration. It has a mysterious feel to it and it's almost like reading one of those thriller books. I'm guessing the story is going to get more gripping.

Fantastic start!
♥

PS. The title... What does it mean? I'm curious, haha!

deepseabed September 20 2011, 05:34:22 UTC

Thank your for the sweet words. <3 I'm really, really glad to be able to write and post something again. :) And, the title, "Ikaros" means "Icarus" in English. A name from Greek mythology.

Your comment made me grin a lot. I really hope this story will be more gripping!

Thank you so much for your lovely comment. ♥

engel_sehnsucht September 19 2011, 19:33:43 UTC

Ooh, interesting... the signs of Matt's illness made me think of a certain disease, but then he vanished...

deepseabed September 20 2011, 05:35:22 UTC

I'm glad you thought this was interesting! :)

Thank you so much for reading and commenting! <3

allwithwings September 21 2011, 11:51:52 UTC

I'm intrigued already, and not that much has happened! :) I just love the flow and rhythm of your writing - it's so easy to read, yet not annoyingly simple or cliche in any way. Just lovely.

Early summer. The deafening roar of the audience. The overwhelming deluge of bliss. The large sea of smiling faces. Smiles. His smile. That cheeky smile.

I love the way you use sparse sentences to paint the picture so simply but beautifully. So few words, but I can see everything perfectly. And I love how we see Matt through Dom's eyes - we can see how Dom sees him, with such love, just truly adores him. It's wonderful, makes my heart glow :)

And there's gentle humour in there, which works perfectly.

He looked as if he wanted to assimilate into the carpet. and He'd even said in a hoarse voice that he was going to die, which had made Dominic chuckle uncontrollably. Matthew had needed a lot of comforting, his lover stroking his hair, massaging his stiff muscles, and breathing reassuring words. It's not the laugh-out-loud funny, but brings ( ... )

deepseabed September 26 2011, 06:19:10 UTC

I always feel the need to do something about my writing, because I don't have a large English vocabulary and I really know that. So, when I'm writing in English I want my words to be effective as they can be. But at the same time, I don't think my stories in English are much different from my stories in Japanese. Haha. Perhaps, I can go only this way.

I'm really, really glad you used the word 'rhythm'. Because I always care about that, when I'm writing something. But I don't know if it's as effective as I think it is, because I'm not an English speaker. So, your words really made me happy. :) Thank you!

It would be wonderful as well even if this comment was not from you, but actually this means a lot, because I really know you're a stunning Belldom writer.

Thank you so much for reading and leaving such a wonderful comment. ♥

(And, I love your icon image. <3)