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Preoccupied (for liuyaxo)

May 19, 2015 09:24

Title: Preoccupied
Recipient: liuyaxo
Rating: G
Word Count: 2K
Warning(s): none
Summary: Jaebum and Jinyoung meet at a wedding. Both are lost in thought over each other. And one really wants to dance.
A/N: Dear recipient, I hope you like it! This is the first fic I’ve ever written in my life so please be gentle :) Also, a big thank you to D, G and H.

( He’s sitting right in front of me and he’s so hot. As soon as he catches my heart, I’m like oh my god. )

rating: g, year: 2015, length: under 5k

Comments 4

electricdino May 19 2015, 21:03:23 UTC

This was a really good fic, especially for the first one you've ever written. It flows quite well, and I loved the differences between Jaebum and Jinyoung. You got just the right level of sass for Jinyoung, and it was all very believable. Well done, this was a nice read. And congratulations on writing your first fic!! ^_^

hipployta May 21 2015, 03:03:06 UTC

Cute...and of course Jinyoung decided to step up and pull Jaebum out of his own head LOL

anna_jwky May 21 2015, 17:37:25 UTC

i just notice your fic is here!! sorry for not noticing it sooner. congrats congrats on your first fic XDD
well i leave this comment just for you to know i read it and i love it!!
i'm proud of your writing skills, and i'm glad you made it public :)
reading the good comment, i can't help feel happy for you! you deserve the praise ><
i hope this is not the only one! i expected more will come from you :DD

candyd1ve May 27 2015, 14:29:17 UTC

In my head I was screaming at the both of them, and for a moment I thought omg this is one of those missed chances kind of things and I'mg oing to be so bitter because it's too good for them not to say anything to each other omg. BUT it wasn't!!! thank you for this!!!