That story was way to good and way to sad and now I'm all emotionally drained.
I LOVE THIS. Holy crap. I love that at the end of the scene you end with pretty much the same thing and I love how this little girl slowly breaks down. OMG. And the name? Wow. Perfect. You've done well, young jedi.
Awesome sweetie, serioulsy dude. I just wish we had a bit more with the boy, a bit more of a scene with him so that we could know him and get close to him as Juliet had. It's perfect the way it is but if you want to, you could do that to.
Love this, awesome job! More stories please!
Ooooor you could write a scene and I could I dunno, like add to it? It might work, like a game. It doesn't have to be serious, just a fun story. Wanna start or should I?
I wanted to add more scenes with him but I just couldn't think of anything, maybe I'll be hit with a brainblast and add more, but I'm pretty content with it for now.
I think we should use the first characters we came up with for that big ass story we were gonna do for Writers and do a round-robin of sorts like you said. You could start, I'm horrible at starting stories (:
Ughhhhh..... would you kill me if I said I kinda sorta didn't remember those characters? I'll try something else then, you can go with it or I can start something else but here it goes
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(:D I'm quite the fan too, this is turning out better than I thought it would. I am pretty good! Working on a fanfiction story while thinking up ideas for this one. Haha, I would want to see how small these get, but I'm afraid they might disappear at this rate, so new comment it is! :D Anyway, how are you? And I was wondering if you have an AIM account? Btw, our story, as of your last post, is thirteen thousand, six hundred and forty eight words
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Mia remembered getting her driver's license. They were in a crappy town in New Jersey and had just finished a job. The man in the suit had already set up the appointment and there was a woman with a tight bun waiting for her and her sister when they arrived. She drove about twenty-five miles an hour and almost ran over the curb while trying to parallel park. "It will do," the woman said when they parked in front of a gas station. She wrote up a piece of paper and told her that she'd get her license in a few weeks
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It just didn't make any sense. If those children ended up dead then they might've not been kidnapped by the same people.
Ada's eyebrows furrowed as Mia stared at the computer screen with a glare.
Questions ran through Ada's head as she tried to stay focused on the road.
Even if they were kidnapped by the same people, why would they kill them and not others? What reason could be behind it? They had kidnapped them for a reason, right? So what's the point in killing them? And why disfigure them so severely that they're barely recognized? Why?
Unless...
"Those kids they found aren't really the ones that were taken."
Mia looked at Ada with a questioning gaze, "What?"
"They're not the same kids." Ada repeated, "It was probably just another precaution so people wouldn't realize the pattern."
"That's why they had to shoot one of them in the face." Mia mumbled, "So he couldn't be identified just by looking at him because it wasn't really himAda nodded
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Austin was a town that promised a lot of things to it's residents. A new school was being built right outside of the limits, a shopping mall had gone up in the last couple of years and a new development was slowly working on being developed after the ground breaking ceremony. The small town had once been hit by disaster. A company called Verifax, a global solutions and defense contracting firm, had made Austin it's home for years. And then the CEO, Maximus Canton died and left the firm to his twins, Alexandria and Max Jr. The two had a huge battle over shares of stock and inheritance and decided to split the company. One half went to Northern California and the other to Chicago where the twins lived
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As soon as the two sisters entered the town, Ada noticed something strange about it.
The way people avoided looking at the two as they walked into the cafe, like they were afraid to make eye contact. The way they glanced occasionally in random directions, like something was about to come out of nowhere and kill them where they stood. Ada didn't understand the look of fear that was present in their eyes.
It was like each and every one of them knew something they shouldn't and if anyone were to find out what they knew, their lives would be in danger.
Ada had been in and out of many towns. Many times her and Mia would be greeted with smiles when they were strolling around and others they'd be ignored and brushed off like they didn't exist, but that was to be expected, not everyone was friendly and welcoming.
Ada didn't even remember walking back to the table where her sister sat, she blinked and she was there, staring back into her sister's worried green eyes, "He found us
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That story was way to good and way to sad and now I'm all emotionally drained.
I LOVE THIS. Holy crap. I love that at the end of the scene you end with pretty much the same thing and I love how this little girl slowly breaks down. OMG. And the name? Wow. Perfect. You've done well, young jedi.
Awesome sweetie, serioulsy dude. I just wish we had a bit more with the boy, a bit more of a scene with him so that we could know him and get close to him as Juliet had. It's perfect the way it is but if you want to, you could do that to.
Love this, awesome job! More stories please!
Ooooor you could write a scene and I could I dunno, like add to it? It might work, like a game. It doesn't have to be serious, just a fun story. Wanna start or should I?
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Why thank you~
I wanted to add more scenes with him but I just couldn't think of anything, maybe I'll be hit with a brainblast and add more, but I'm pretty content with it for now.
I think we should use the first characters we came up with for that big ass story we were gonna do for Writers and do a round-robin of sorts like you said. You could start, I'm horrible at starting stories (:
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That would break the pattern.
It just didn't make any sense. If those children ended up dead then they might've not been kidnapped by the same people.
Ada's eyebrows furrowed as Mia stared at the computer screen with a glare.
Questions ran through Ada's head as she tried to stay focused on the road.
Even if they were kidnapped by the same people, why would they kill them and not others? What reason could be behind it? They had kidnapped them for a reason, right? So what's the point in killing them? And why disfigure them so severely that they're barely recognized? Why?
Unless...
"Those kids they found aren't really the ones that were taken."
Mia looked at Ada with a questioning gaze, "What?"
"They're not the same kids." Ada repeated, "It was probably just another precaution so people wouldn't realize the pattern."
"That's why they had to shoot one of them in the face." Mia mumbled, "So he couldn't be identified just by looking at him because it wasn't really himAda nodded ( ... )
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The way people avoided looking at the two as they walked into the cafe, like they were afraid to make eye contact. The way they glanced occasionally in random directions, like something was about to come out of nowhere and kill them where they stood. Ada didn't understand the look of fear that was present in their eyes.
It was like each and every one of them knew something they shouldn't and if anyone were to find out what they knew, their lives would be in danger.
Ada had been in and out of many towns. Many times her and Mia would be greeted with smiles when they were strolling around and others they'd be ignored and brushed off like they didn't exist, but that was to be expected, not everyone was friendly and welcoming.
But this, this was different ( ... )
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