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delphix_sible

Flynn/Clu "Other Half"

Feb 12, 2011 23:08

Title: Other Half
Pairing: Kevin/Clu
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Clu has never had sex before. And now they're about to do it with a User. For this prompt at tronkinkmeme
Disclaimer: Sadly, none of these characters are mine :( Much thanks to Vangelis for the beautiful music that helped me write this! Thanks to brightdreamer for pointing out the glaring ( Read more... )

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delphix_sible February 13 2011, 18:19:17 UTC

Thank you ^^ They make such a lovely couple

crackerjacklane February 13 2011, 20:07:03 UTC

AMAZING. By far one of my favorite fanfics ever.The dialogue was amazing. Please dont put it in present tense. That would throw off certian parts of the story. Perfect just the way it is.

delphix_sible February 13 2011, 20:08:28 UTC

Thank you ^^ Glad you enjoyed it!

crackerjacklane February 13 2011, 20:21:31 UTC

your so welcome. cant wait for you to post your next one.

lalondon13 February 13 2011, 23:03:34 UTC

This is gorgeous..I loved the desperate need of Clu and the way you described that. Thanks for sharing this :)

delphix_sible February 14 2011, 00:08:52 UTC

Thanks for reading!

brightdreamer February 13 2011, 23:42:40 UTC

Hah... I wouldn't say glaring flaws? ^_^;; (Did you delete my earlier comment? I did have nice things to say too...)

OH! I see, you reposted the whole thing. Was confused for a minute.

Anyway, as I said before...

Really good fic, overall! I love Clu's angst at the beginning, thinking that Flynn was in love with Tron, and thinking he didn't have a chance... and then getting this lovely, sweet moment with his creator. So beautiful.

I can see you've made an effort to fix the present/past tense issues but there's still a few places where you switch. If you want you can hit me up on AIM and I'll point them out. Sometimes it helps to have a second set of eyes looking at things.

delphix_sible February 14 2011, 00:43:01 UTC

Haha yah sorry I just took the whole thing down and tried to go through and fix it up as much as I could. I've read through this damn thing so many times i'm starting to hate it XD

clocksfate April 28 2011, 23:51:07 UTC

Just wow...this is my third time reading it, it's still as beautiful as ever. And this time around, I finally realised the significance of the apple, and that makes the scene in the movie all the more bittersweet.

delphix_sible April 29 2011, 05:48:27 UTC

Thank you so much :3 I'm so glad you enjoyed it