Sestina

[delyrium]

I wrote a sestina for class this week and it was fucking difficult. For those of you who don't know this is the definition of a sestina, according to Webster: "lyrical fixed form consisting of six 6-line usually unrhymed stanzas in which the end words of the first stanza recur as end words of the following five stanzas in a successively rotating

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[attheendofapen]

this is the creepiest thing i have read in months! and well-executed. i don't think i could write a sestina EVER. images that are thrilling, frightening and a little disjointed, in a carnival grotesque kind of way. your sense of sacred and profane is wonderful.

the VillainElla (nerd-power put to good use.)

[annwyn_81]

I love this. I think the most striking element in this piece is the disquieting atmosphere you've captured with a combination of dark, precise images. The poetic elements of sacrifice and the sacred are also cleverly interweaved with the "water" and "nail" imagery. You have a beautiful, haunting style, as well as exceptional technical abilities-- I have yet to attempt a Sestina. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. :)

[delyrium]

thank you! it's always wonderful to get feedback from other writers on poetry-- you should try a sestina. i was skeptical at first but it's so much fun- it really forces you to stick with your imagery and carry it throughout, which is great for me since i tend to abandon my images...

btw, these_words is usually pretty dead- do you know of any other writing communities that are active and actually critique?