Hi, Denny. It is great to see a post from you. I am so in love with Heroes it is ridiculous. Love it, love the cast. LOVE.
About your snippet, I like the atmosphere you are building with the bit you posted. The only edits I would suggest would be minor. Deleting some of the adjectives and making the prose a bit leaner. I like the mood you are creating a lot. And YAY for you. I am so glad you are still writing.
Yep, still trying to get some writing in...actually I write a lot...in between working like crazy. It's just getting harder to post regularly on lj. But I'm going to try:)...
And my god, do I ever love 'heroes', it's not logical. Thank god they don't give me a love story with those superpowers...I'd be a wreck!
And thank you for your comment on the paragraph. I totally hear you. I'll definnitely fix it and appreciate your suggestions - as always.
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About your snippet, I like the atmosphere you are building with the bit you posted. The only edits I would suggest would be minor. Deleting some of the adjectives and making the prose a bit leaner. I like the mood you are creating a lot. And YAY for you. I am so glad you are still writing.
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Yep, still trying to get some writing in...actually I write a lot...in between working like crazy. It's just getting harder to post regularly on lj. But I'm going to try:)...
And my god, do I ever love 'heroes', it's not logical. Thank god they don't give me a love story with those superpowers...I'd be a wreck!
And thank you for your comment on the paragraph. I totally hear you. I'll definnitely fix it and appreciate your suggestions - as always.
take care,
Denny
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