Chapter 4.

Feb 19, 2005 21:38

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mce86 February 19 2005, 23:13:07 UTC
Cory...I hadn't yet read this but I just wanted to tell you...its amazing. The whole thing. Its palpable and tangible and distinct. Its written with feeling and objectivity at the same time. I love it. Its beautiful.

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der_verfasser February 19 2005, 23:29:14 UTC
Aw, thanks Erin. That means a lot. It's not all where I want it to be, and I'm still planning some things out...but it's on it's way. Thanks! *huggles*

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jilliliz February 20 2005, 00:21:23 UTC
The memory of these children will haunt her for the rest of her life, well into her twenties and thirties. The actions of these children will continue to paralyze her regardless of the absurdity she will see in it all.

I don't know if that fits where you have it. It seems like to much of an important idea to just be tacked onto the end.

Otherwise: beautiful. Very good job, Cory.

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der_verfasser February 20 2005, 00:27:38 UTC
I hadn't thought about that. I will make note of it and think it through more.

*blushes* Thank you.

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