As My Colors Fade Out
My second entry for brigits_flame. My last entry did better than I thought it was going to (second place, what?!), so here's to hoping that this one does just as well :) The theme for this entry was 'It hurts when I do this'. I took a dream of mine and gave it several twists, making it more interesting and more... story-like. Again, I welcome all of your
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I see that desert-rose71 has already given you great feedback; a lot of which I absolutely agree with. The biggest note I have for you is to tell your story. It sounds simple, but many people forget that too many words or descriptions really distract from telling a good story. Especially in the piece, when you're dealing with talking wolves and dream sequences, each word is particularly important.
Make sure you help your reader become engaged in your story!
Good luck this round!
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