The query letter, version 2. And 2 versions of version 2.

Oct 21, 2010 23:05

Dear Ms. Jackson,

I am seeking representation for my fantasy novel, The Crimson Mask, complete at 130,000 words.

A synthesis of epic fantasy and Grecian myth with an Asian flair, The Crimson Mask tells the story of Ryjel, an orphan-turned-assassin who must save the world from a powerful mage who has unraveled the laws of death - but to do so, he ( Read more... )

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tormod October 24 2010, 14:57:37 UTC
I don't know much about pitch letters, so I can't help with the body. I do agree with cutting out the underlined parts.

I would say, "Thank you very much" instead of "Thank you so much".

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