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[deusssexmachina]

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7.45A smallish woman in her mid-thirties stumbles into the kitchen. Her lean body is wrapped in a green satin bath robe that has seen better days. She is holding a tea mug in one hand, pressing a wet towel against her forehead with the other. For a little while, she stops and leans on the sink as if all the burdens of the world lay heavy

Comments

[toxic_apiaceae]

Wow, deus. This was really, really good. It was so sad though. I really love the way you played your characters out in this. There was a lot going on, but you did a fantastic job handling it all. Nicely, nicely done.

Also, I really love the fact that you include pictures with your pieces. It's a nice visual to go along with the stories.

[deusssexmachina]

Thanks for the thorough comment! I thought I had replied to it already, bad me :(
I am really happy you liked it, it was a change for me because I tried to have the characters act and speak this time, instead of describing, much like they would in a film.

[dixophilia]

I've been hesitating to read this for some unknown reason, and I must say now that I finally got the chance to sit down and read it today. I'm really impressed. The characters are portrayed very well and the work itself hits quite an emotional chord. Great job. :)

[deusssexmachina]

I am glad that you read even the things that were not Mana related :) They were much harder for me to write...

[dixophilia]

I've read pretty much all your stuff. You have a talent, there's no doubt.

Though, for it being harder, you can't really tell. Like I said, it's well done. The more you strain yourself with different topics, the better you become, especially with the topics you enjoy most. ;)