Wow, your really did it! LOL, you are awesome, jinma chan. My first thought upon reading was "That was sooo cuuute!" My second thought was that this is a very interesting character study. You did a great job coming up with a reasonable explanation for stoner DG. That was pretty sad! Having her lie next to the scarecrow was cute. I had never thought about the aftermath of the travel storm in Kansas. I gotta say that somehow I can't see Gulch getting mad... I know he should, but I think he'd be sad, probably thinking that some terrible fate had befallen his nemesis and her parents (lol @ shades of DG/Gulch creeping up on me once again). I get that it's probably a good idea to destroy such a powerful McGuffin as the Emerald, but I got the impression that the Queen blamed it for what happened to some degree
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I was concerned with how to make a semi-reasonable excuse for DG to get into smoking, and then having her stop and start smoking again. Not easy :)
Surely an experience of being murdered would resonate within your mind, even if it was wiped (and occured fairly recently), no? Seemed logical to me.
Scarecrow = foreshadowing! X3
Judging from the amount of debris around DG when she landed, I'm guessing the house was pretty damaged.
Gulch would be sad, but I think the 'anger' would be like... unfinished business with a rival? Feels kind of hollow to have it end with all the loose ties and whatnot. I'm not sure what I'm talking about anymore.
Yeah, I think she would a little; maybe resenting the fact she didn't deal with such a powerful object before anyone could get their hands on it (assuming she knew about it, but I think she would have
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I found it quite reasonable. Good job! Using her murder as a catalyst for continuing nightmares, and the nightmares as the reason why she starts smoking is pretty ingenious
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Why did I imagine them as gossip-mongering, fake people? Damn you society!
I'm sure he sometimes misses the roaring of DG's bike tearing recklessly through the town :)
I'm glad I cleared that up then! I re-read it and thought : "Wait, that doesn't explain anything!". So yeah.
Really? Wow, maybe Glitch left a lasting impression on Alan? A funky walk.
I think he's grateful that he's been given any work; gives him a sense of usefulness and purpose, I think.
Why thanks! We've got a wavelength connection here or something... paint.
Exactly: no explination, so it's open season on the reason. Have I made a rhyme?
I don't know. The idea was cracky, but it ended up not being that at all, I guess? I don't know how to write any other way! Good, bad? I don't know anynore.
Me too.
I'm... a terrible psychic? And love for the paint play, DOUBLE love for the Glitch-esque shirt he' wearing! :D
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I was concerned with how to make a semi-reasonable excuse for DG to get into smoking, and then having her stop and start smoking again. Not easy :)
Surely an experience of being murdered would resonate within your mind, even if it was wiped (and occured fairly recently), no? Seemed logical to me.
Scarecrow = foreshadowing! X3
Judging from the amount of debris around DG when she landed, I'm guessing the house was pretty damaged.
Gulch would be sad, but I think the 'anger' would be like... unfinished business with a rival? Feels kind of hollow to have it end with all the loose ties and whatnot. I'm not sure what I'm talking about anymore.
Yeah, I think she would a little; maybe resenting the fact she didn't deal with such a powerful object before anyone could get their hands on it (assuming she knew about it, but I think she would have ( ... )
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Good old English classes. Foreshadowing FTW.
Why did I imagine them as gossip-mongering, fake people? Damn you society!
I'm sure he sometimes misses the roaring of DG's bike tearing recklessly through the town :)
I'm glad I cleared that up then! I re-read it and thought : "Wait, that doesn't explain anything!". So yeah.
Really? Wow, maybe Glitch left a lasting impression on Alan? A funky walk.
I think he's grateful that he's been given any work; gives him a sense of usefulness and purpose, I think.
Why thanks! We've got a wavelength connection here or something... paint.
Exactly: no explination, so it's open season on the reason. Have I made a rhyme?
I don't know. The idea was cracky, but it ended up not being that at all, I guess? I don't know how to write any other way! Good, bad? I don't know anynore.
Me too.
I'm... a terrible psychic? And love for the paint play, DOUBLE love for the Glitch-esque shirt he' wearing! :D
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