Taxi Drive

[dgm_loves_brawl]

New York City: over populated, dirty, gang runned and too busy for your own car usage.' Just an everyday thought for the city's grouchiest taxi driver, Youou Kurogane.

He was a tall, red-eyed, Asian and built well enough to make some wonder why he wasn't some sort of Olympian. He was the sort of guy who did things not watch from the crowed roads

Comments

[questix]

Eh, it's kind of interesting but you definitely need a beta. The writing almost made me hit the back button a few times, but the plot sparked my interest.

A few key issues:

Kurogane would be his last name, so it'd be first- Youou is his first name. Also, Fay wouldn't give him nicknames like -roro if they were in NY city unless they were both Japanese.

Still kind of interested to see the next part, if you get some time, I guess. Syaoran being Kurogane's son is kind of an interesting twist.

[fushicho_eien]

looking forward to the next part, but as questix said, some of your wording confused me like "He was the sort of guy who did things not watch from the crowed roads"
what the hell??
but that's my only complaint. :D good story :D

[dgm_loves_brawl]

Hey, everyone needs good complaints. And a beta. Betas help a lot, too....
Anywho, Thank you! I'll try my best!>.