i wanted to breathe smoke.

[die_in_her_arms]

my essays need harsh, scathing critique.  i ask you to be unmerciful, scathing, nitpicky, and downright mean.  think of them as masochists-they need punishment.  i wrote two, so if you could take the five minutes you would normally take reading my lj and put them towards something actually productive (because it seems that although everyone says

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FREDDY IS THE MAN.com

[tokenbuckwheat]

okay freddy i read the first essay and here are just suggestions that i came up with (remember that my english grades are kind of poor so take all of my criticism with "a whole shaker full of salt" - The Things They Carried by Tim O'Brien

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[tokenbuckwheat]

I AGREE, HE's THE MAN! HE'S JUST THAT COOL! Go YOU!

[anonymous]

Hey John. Yeah wow you're an amzing writer. I read your essays more than once and yet idn't find anything wrong with them. You know I'd help i I oculd but I have no ideas and nothing to say other than WOW. yeah well anyways, I love you. thanks for fathering my child, whom we have yet to see...wait no, you're the mom. yeah I have no idea. oh and about homeocming, I'm sorry about eveything that happened before it but I'm glad I could go and make your night a little bit better. I had a really good time so thanks for taking me. and sorry I looked like crap. haha. "if you try hard enough you can drown 'em" "yeah well we stole you from the orphanage. you came with the cabinets" haha you're friends are mad funny. I LOVE YOU! ~ally