fic: Temptations

[dior_anghel]

 More Gippalai fanfiction. I love these two too much for words.

WORKSAFE. (Though it does contain strong language at some points.)

As the head of what was most likely the sneakiest, slipperiest organization in the history of Spira, Baralai had eyes and ears everywhere. He hadn’t even needed to plant them - it seemed that his army of spies simply came

Comments

[iamleaper]

Oooh~ Tasty. I liked how you showed Baralai's dual-nature here, something we don't get to see often. I want to say that it seems weird that he'd go and threaten someone and then turn around and play romantic in the streets... but then, I realize that I could see it happening.

I most liked his line "But for now, you can just call me ‘the guy with the gun’."

Excellent expression of duality here... and, of course, I'm always thankful for a little boykissing. ;)

[dior_anghel]

Thank you! I know the extreme contrast does seem strange, but I do think it's feasible. I like exploring the sides of Baralai that we don't get to see much in the game.

[gysecune]

Some of your lines are just...wow. Straight-up good writing.

He stared at the paper, the contrast of black on white burning into his retinas so that he could not escape the words, not even when he closed his eyes and pressed the heels of his palms to his face. and Baralai's thoughts on the word "fucking," and of course the end. *_*

I'm amazed. Please excuse me. Also, I agree - I like how you handled the other side of Baralai's personality. It's refreshing because a lot of people don't even touch that.

[dior_anghel]

=D 'Wow' is probably one of the best responses, like, ever. Thank you! I'm flattered you liked it so much. I do wish more people acknowledged Baralai's strength.

And yeah, I can't really see Baralai using the word 'fuck' without very good reason. He's not the type to swear casually.

Thanks again! I like you icon, by the way.