Apple Red (2/2)interrobamJuly 31 2012, 02:14:31 UTC
When he came a second time it was hard to hide the flicker of pride under her scowl. Yet it was still possible, and she ran and bit and scratched just as before. She made him fight for his prize, she did not spare a look to her brother's face, watching half lit in the corner. She was a wildcat once more, and it excited him terribly, she could feel his tension. She made subtle things different: her barbs were duller, she yielded just the smallest bit faster. The Priest had longed for something like this: the girl who would fall in love with her rapist. The beauty forgiving the beast. He had destroyed so many other girls in pursuit of what Esmerelda planned to give him, like the head of a saint, on a silver platter. She took note of how he cherished her bruises, the longing looks he gave them. He lasted longer, lingered with her on the floor, did not vow to evade her seductive form forever once he left. It was working
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Re: Apple Red (2/2)little_elfieJuly 31 2012, 20:23:10 UTC
UNF.
God, this was just perfect. I love the idea of Esmeralda as 'the spine', using her power over Frollo to make Paris a better place for the more vulnerable members of society; that is so what she would do in that situation. So yeah, spot on characterisation. You hit on quite a few of my own personal kinks in this piece so I tip my hat to you for that, and of course to the lovely Andalasia for the prompt. I'd say more but you've rendered me quite ineloquent at the moment.
Re: Apple Red (2/2)afterandalasiaAugust 14 2012, 10:16:02 UTC
So, so sorry for the delay in replying. My internet can go jump off a cliff.
On topic: oh, wow. Wow, my god, this is so perfect. I love that you take it back to the beginning, the start of the drawing him in, and the way that Esmeralda uses him. I love how there's still the flicker of Esmeralda having plans that are good for people beneath, even though she's going about them in this way as well. In short: perfect.
Dark!Esmerelda. Frollo might rule the city... but she rules Frollo.
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“Nothing becomes tempting which is not first forbidden.” She knew what he liked ( ... )
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God, this was just perfect. I love the idea of Esmeralda as 'the spine', using her power over Frollo to make Paris a better place for the more vulnerable members of society; that is so what she would do in that situation. So yeah, spot on characterisation. You hit on quite a few of my own personal kinks in this piece so I tip my hat to you for that, and of course to the lovely Andalasia for the prompt. I'd say more but you've rendered me quite ineloquent at the moment.
Wow. Really.
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On topic: oh, wow. Wow, my god, this is so perfect. I love that you take it back to the beginning, the start of the drawing him in, and the way that Esmeralda uses him. I love how there's still the flicker of Esmeralda having plans that are good for people beneath, even though she's going about them in this way as well. In short: perfect.
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