Ahaha, the ending is great. The tone is consistent, which is a good thing. The essay in general is well-written, but there's something peculiar about this sentence:
If I thought anyone would understand what that has anything to do with being profound or intellectual (two words I don’t think anyone has ever associated with reality television) I’d leave it there, but seeing as the percentage of us reality stars is so slim in the world I’m guessing you don’t and that the answer surprised you somewhat.
"...the percentage of us reality stars is so slim in the world..."? Sounds kind of off. Not quite sure. The sentence itself seems a bit jumbled; maybe you can divide it with a semicolon? I don't know.
I like it a lot. Personally, I probably wouldn't use "you" in an essay, but it doesn't seem totally out of place here. good job ally with a star. memories in stricks class... : ) smile girlie
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If I thought anyone would understand what that has anything to do with being profound or intellectual (two words I don’t think anyone has ever associated with reality television) I’d leave it there, but seeing as the percentage of us reality stars is so slim in the world I’m guessing you don’t and that the answer surprised you somewhat.
"...the percentage of us reality stars is so slim in the world..."? Sounds kind of off. Not quite sure. The sentence itself seems a bit jumbled; maybe you can divide it with a semicolon? I don't know.
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smile girlie
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<3 britt
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