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[divvy]

we are not unique and beautiful snowflakes tour, 2004
tired boys and wired eyes
fob, midtown, gch, tai gen, travis / william, 3799 words

-- this is how it has to be: a kiss for luck, submerge myself and in seven weeks resurface (even if we don't look back again) tired boys and wired eyes exposing imperfections, to the public eye we're perfect (

Comments

[gwaciemcgeek]

Aww...
This story is absolutely adorable!
I particularly like this line
Patrick sighs and lays face down beside a grinning Pete. He thinks, and says, "If I die, I want you all to kill yourselves to avenge me."
I'm pretty sure that last little section was my favorite.
That or William stealing the cookies.

[divvy]

oh thank you! i appreciate any love that gets given to me about writing fob because i don't do it at all. i'm incredibly happy that this fic still gets love ;)

and ha, william does enjoy his cookies

[gwaciemcgeek]

you're welcome.
it was a great fic.

and everyone enjoys cookies.
and william was definetly right, stolen cookies are the best.

[divvy]

i'm slowly becoming less and less of a treckett fan but don't tell anyone :( i still think they are perfect. and thank you.

[tapeduptogether]

ahah. this story amused me to no end..
I know this is like a year after you actually posted this,
But hey greatness is greatness!

=3

(meaning your story is the greatness)

[divvy]

a year or two after i post it or after you comment, it is always appreciated :) i'm glad you enjoyed this as much as i enjoyed writing it

[kat7077]

So, I decided to comment on this one first because of the palahniuk quote at the beginning (I am easily attracted to shiny things, but your writing is so full of them that it's hard to pick any one).

Wow. The language in this piece comes out sounding so...well, clean would be one way to describe it (maybe not the best word for it. I am desperately in need of a bigger vocabulary). From what I've seen so far, your writing never fails to be eloquent and elegantly simple and it's effortless to fall into the storyline because your pacing and style is just...guh. Brilliant. There were zero clunky/jagged phrases throughout the entire piece.

I adore the humor you use in this - it's so gentle yet completely realistic, like listening to people who really love each other bitch and moan just because they know they can get away with it; it's intimate, that's what it is. Wow.

Perfect example:

Gabe throws a pillow at William's head and huffs, starts muttering to himself in Spanish, something about "tonto" and "feo," something Travis will later

[divvy]

i had to read this over again to try to pinpoint where i used a quote and then realized that it's right up at the top. that's what the fall out boy, midtown, gym class heroes, academy is tour was called in 2004!

first off, this is the first comment of yours that i will comment back to (because i have a habit of replying to every one i receive) and already all i can think to say is just thank you.

i appreciate everything you said about the pace because sometimes i feel like i am going too fast or too slow and i reread things after i've written them, thinking no one is going to think it flows or sounds right. i drive myself crazy trying to avoid clunky phrases so i'm glad it worked

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[karisma94]

I DONT KNOW WHICH IS THE BEST PART WILLIAM BITCH SLAPPING GABE OR TRAVIS TELLING PATRICK TO "Kiss the mu'fuckin concrete." CAUSE THAT WAS FUNNY OR EVEN THE PART WHERE WILLIAM WAS TELLING TRAVIE TO KISS HIM AND TRAVIE WAS LIKE "What do you think I'm tryin to do?" Travie says between kisses against William's neck. "Your dumb ass keeps talkin."

MEMMS

[divvy]

your enthusiasm makes me smile so much :[ i'm so glad you enjoyed this